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You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have bee v.16

You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have bee v. 16
Dear Jenny, I’m so sorry that I haven’t kept in touch for a while. I’ve been busy recently. I want to tell you my updated news! I considered whether I will go college or not. After I decided I chose one of college near your city. The college’s finance major are well-known in the field of the industry. I hope you can give me some useful tips. The semester will start next July, and I want to explore before the class open. As I said, I’ve been quiet rough days, I needed to save money as much as I can. I did two part time jobs and apply scholarships for my making a living. I hope you don’t ming doing this for me. It is much better a person who I know to get particular information instead of me. Best regards,
Dear Jenny,

I’m
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
sorry that I haven’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
in touch for a while. I’ve been busy recently.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you my updated news!
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
considered whether I will go college or not.
“After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
I decided I chose one of college near your city. The college’s finance major are well-known in the field of the industry. I hope you can give me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
useful tips.

The semester will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
next
July, and I want to explore
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
open. As I said, I’ve been
Did you mean "quite"? 'quiet' means 'silent', 'quite' mean 'very' or 'to a moderate extent'
quiet
rough days, I needed to save money as much as I can. I did two
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
part time
jobs and apply scholarships for my making a living.

I hope you don’t
Possible spelling mistake found.
ming
doing this for me. It is much better a person who I know to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
particular information
instead
of me.

Best regards,
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have bee v. 16

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
141 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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