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You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have bee v.16

You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have bee v. 16

Dear Jenny, I’m so sorry that I haven’t kept in touch for a while. I’ve been busy recently. I want to tell you my updated news! I considered whether I will go college or not. After I decided I chose one of college near your city. The college’s finance major are well-known in the field of the industry. I hope you can give me some useful tips. The semester will start next July, and I want to explore before the class open. As I said, I’ve been quiet rough days, I needed to save money as much as I can. I did two part time jobs and apply scholarships for my making a living. I hope you don’t ming doing this for me. It is much better a person who I know to get particular information instead of me. Best regards,

Dear Jenny,

I’m This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 sorry that I haven’t This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retained
kept
 in touch for a while. I’ve been busy recently.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 want to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :inform
tell
 you my updated news! Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 considered whether I will go college or not. “After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
 I decided I chose one of college near your city. The college’s finance major are well-known in the field of the industry. I hope you can give me This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 useful tips.

The semester will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
next
 July, and I want to explore This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
 open. As I said, I’ve been Did you mean "quite"? 'quiet' means 'silent', 'quite' mean 'very' or 'to a moderate extent'quite
quiet
 rough days, I needed to save money as much as I can. I did two This word is normally spelled with hyphen.part-time
part time
 jobs and apply scholarships for my making a living.

I hope you don’t Possible spelling mistake found.MingKingkingwingmindring
ming
 doing this for me. It is much better a person who I know to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 particular information instead
 of me.

Best regards, 

2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have bee v. 16

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

141 words

This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1

4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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