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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v.6

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v. 6
The chart shows average distances that people in England travelled using different forms of transport in the years 1985 and 2000. It is clear that the total number of miles travelled by English people using all modes of transport increased significantly between 1985 and 2000. The car was by far the most used form of transport in both years. In 1985, the average person travelled 3, 199 miles by car, and this rose to 4, 806 miles in the year 2000. The figures for miles travelled by train, long distance bus, taxi and other modes also increased from 1985 to 2000. Travel by taxi saw the most significant change, with more than a threefold increase from 13 miles per person per year in 1985 to 42 miles in 2000. There was a fall in the average distances for three forms of transport, namely walking, bicycle and local bus. In 1985, English people walked an average of 255 miles, but this figure fell by 18 miles in 2000. Bicycle use fell from 51 to 41 miles over the period shown, while the biggest downward change was in the use of local buses, with average miles per person falling from 429 to 274 over the 15-year period.
The chart
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distances that
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in England
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using
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different
forms of
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transport
in the years 1985 and 2000.

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that the total number of miles
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travelled
by English
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people
using all modes of
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transport
increased
significantly
between 1985 and 2000. The car was by far the most
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used
form of
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transport
in both years.

In 1985, the
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average
person
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travelled
3,
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199 miles
by car, and this rose to 4,
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806 miles
in the
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year
2000. The figures for miles
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travelled
by train, long distance bus, taxi and other modes
also
increased from 1985 to 2000. Travel by taxi
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the most significant
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, with more than a threefold increase from
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13 miles
per person per
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year
in 1985 to
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42 miles
in 2000.

There was a fall in the
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distances for three forms of
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transport
,
namely
walking, bicycle and local bus. In 1985, English
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walked an
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of
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255 miles
,
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this figure fell by
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18 miles
in 2000. Bicycle
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use
fell from 51 to
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41 miles
over the period shown, while the biggest downward
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change
was in the
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of local buses, with
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miles per person falling from 429 to 274 over the
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15-year
period.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. v. 6

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4 paragraphs
205 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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