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You missed a flight due to a problem at the airport. v.4

You missed a flight due to a problem at the airport. v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to inform you that I missed my international flight to London on 17th January for a reason which was beyond my control and which actually transpired due to a problem at the airport. My flight was scheduled at 12: 00 pm and I had arrived at the airport well in advance. Suddenly, I felt that I needed to eat something at the airport, and so I went to one of the upscale restaurants at the airport where some security personnel of the airport asked everyone to stay there until further notice. I guess it was a security issue,   which eventually forced me to abandon my flight. Anyway, missing the fight caused me to miss an important seminar on launching a new product. So, since I missed the flight because of a reason, which was beyond my control and had something to do with the airport authority, I would truly appreciate it if you give me a full refund for my ticket. I am attaching the ticket with this letter for your convenience. Yours faithfully, Le Nhan Tong
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I missed my international
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flight
to London on 17th January for a reason which was beyond my control and which actually transpired due to a problem at the airport.

My
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flight
was scheduled
at 12: 00 pm and I had arrived at the
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airport
well in advance.
Suddenly
, I felt that I needed to eat something at the
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airport
, and
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so
I went to one of the upscale restaurants at the
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airport
where
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some
security personnel of the
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airport
asked everyone to stay there until
further
notice. I guess it was a security issue,
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which
eventually
forced me to abandon my
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flight
. Anyway, missing the fight caused me to miss an
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important
seminar on launching a new product.

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So
, since I missed the
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flight
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because
of a reason, which was beyond my control and had something to do with the
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airport
authority, I would
truly
appreciate it if you give me a full refund for my ticket. I am attaching the ticket with this letter for your convenience.

Yours
faithfully
,

Le
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Nhan
Tong
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You missed a flight due to a problem at the airport. v. 4

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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