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You recently visited a tourist attraction and you were very pleased with the help given to you by the staff. v.2

You recently visited a tourist attraction and you were very pleased with the help given to you by the staff. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I visited the famous Vinevasi Waterfall after learning it from a friend and took your service for the tour. The service I was offered was excellent and I would like to thank you for that. I wasn’t exactly planning to visit the waterfall, but, then I had to travel to Kuala Lumpur suddenly for a business trip, and that’s when I remembered what my friend had told me about your tourist place. So, after finishing my work, I decided to visit your beautiful tourist attraction for a couple of days. But, after arriving there, I asked myself why I had not planned for a longer stay because all of your staffs were very courteous and friendly. They didn’t just make sure that I was comfortable on the tourist bus and at the hotel, but also made sure my belongings were kept in the right place. They took me to the best local restaurant and informed a great deal about the history of the place. I would like to thank you. Also, please convey my good wishes to your staff. I would like to mention that, after talking to some staff members, I felt like they were not getting enough time off from their works. So, I would be glad if you try to address that issue to make sure that they feel appreciated even more for what they do. Yours faithfully, Rogerio Frugardo
Dear Sir or Madam,

I visited the
famous
Vinevasi
Waterfall after learning it from a friend and took your service for the tour. The service I
was offered
was excellent and I would like to thank you for that.

I wasn’t exactly planning to visit the waterfall,
but
, then I had to travel to Kuala Lumpur
suddenly
for a business trip, and that’s when I remembered what my friend had
told
me about your tourist place.
So
, after finishing my work, I decided to visit your
beautiful
tourist attraction for a couple of days.
But
, after arriving there, I asked myself why I had not planned for a longer stay
because
all of your staffs were
very
courteous and friendly. They didn’t
just
make
sure that I was comfortable on the tourist bus and at the hotel,
but
also
made sure my belongings were
kept
in the right place. They took me to the best local restaurant and informed a great deal about the history of the place.

I would like to thank you.
Also
,
please
convey my
good
wishes to your staff. I would like to mention that, after talking to
some
staff members, I felt like they were not getting
enough
time off from their works.
So
, I would be glad if you try to address that issue to
make
sure that they feel appreciated even more for what they do.

Yours
faithfully
,

Rogerio
Frugardo
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter You recently visited a tourist attraction and you were very pleased with the help given to you by the staff. v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
236 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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