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You recently visited a tourist attraction and you were very pleased with the help given to you by the staff. v.1

You recently visited a tourist attraction and you were very pleased with the help given to you by the staff. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Pham Van Duc, a tourist from Vietnam, recently been to your Illusion 3D Art Museum in Kuala Lumpur, Malaysia and had been overwhelmed both with the collection and courteous staff. I am writing to express my appreciation for the wonderful experience that I had during my visit to your Museum. I took a week-long vacation to Kuala Lumpur with my wife and daughter in August and learned about your Museum from TripAdvisor, a useful website for tourists. After we reached your Museum, the receptionist explained what we can expect once inside and what we can do to enjoy our time. She was very friendly and cooperative. Once we got inside, another staff member greeted us and then escorted us to different worth enjoying 3D collections. My daughter had thoroughly enjoyed her time and we took several pictures to capture the moment. He was with us until the last moment and had been quite cordial. I would like to thank you for a great museum with a fabulous selection and on top of that, gracious staff members who have a genuine smile and a positive mentality to let visitors enjoy their time. Please convey my regards and best wishes to them. With appreciation from Vietnam. Yours faithfully, Pham Van Duc
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am
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Pham
Van
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Duc
, a tourist from Vietnam, recently been to your Illusion 3D Art
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Museum
in Kuala Lumpur, Malaysia and had
been overwhelmed
both with the collection and courteous staff. I am writing to express my appreciation for the wonderful experience that I had during my visit to your Museum.

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I
took a week-long vacation to Kuala Lumpur with my wife and daughter in August and learned about your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Museum
from TripAdvisor, a useful website for tourists. After we reached your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Museum
, the receptionist
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
what we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
once inside and what we can do to enjoy our time. She was
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very
friendly and cooperative. Once we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
inside, another staff member greeted us and then escorted us to
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different
worth enjoying 3D collections. My daughter had
thoroughly
enjoyed her
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
time and
we took several pictures to capture the moment. He was with us until the last moment and had been quite cordial.

I would like to thank you for a great
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
with a fabulous selection and
on top of that
, gracious staff members who have a genuine smile and a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
mentality to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
visitors enjoy their time.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
convey my regards and best wishes to them.

With appreciation from Vietnam.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Pham
Van
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Duc
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter You recently visited a tourist attraction and you were very pleased with the help given to you by the staff. v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
214 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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