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You live in a room in college with you share with another student. However, , there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to accommodation officer at the college. In the latter, -describe the situatio v. 2

Dear Sir, My name is Shivani. I live in your college accommodation and I am writing in regards to some problems I have been having recently that you have made it difficult for me to concentrate my work. I am in my second year now and certainly share my room with a person who is in fourth year. While I understand that sharing a room is required for all residents in this accommodation, my roommate has been making it very difficult for me to study. The problem, is that he often invites people over for parties without telling me in advance. This was true even last week during the exam period. I have tried to reason with him but I doubt that things will change. I am hoping that you will be able to place me in a quiter room for the next semester. I apologise for the trouble, but I need to be able to study in my residence. Thank you very much for your help. Yours faithfully,

IELTS letter You live in a room in college with you share with another student. However, , there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to accommodation officer at the college. In the latter, -describe the situatio v.2

Dear Sir, My name is
Shivani
. I
live
in your college
accommodation and
I am writing
in regards to
some
problems I have been having recently that you have made it difficult for me to concentrate my work. I am in my second year
now
and
certainly
share my room with a person who is in fourth year. While I understand that sharing a room
is required
for all residents in this accommodation, my roommate has been making it
very
difficult for me to study. The problem, is that he
often
invites
people
over for parties without telling me in advance. This was true even last week during the exam period. I have tried to reason with him
but
I doubt that things will
change
. I am hoping that you will be able to place me in a
quiter
room for the
next
semester.
I
apologise
for the trouble,
but
I need to be able to study in my residence. Thank you
very
much for your
help
. Yours
faithfully
,
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
8 paragraphs
169 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resources: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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