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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the si v.5

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the si v. 5
Dear John, I am writing to let you know the difficulties I am facing ever since I moved into room 37 in the west wing hostel. I am the new football coach here and need to wake up by 4: 00 AM every morning to train students. The room you have allotted to me is already occupied by another sophomore from this college. I am feeling uncomfortable to live along with students. Main problems: there is pandemonium in the room; he brings his friends to party sometimes and the room echoes with loud conversations or music which makes me restless in the nights. I often work late as I have to supervise the playground maintenance which starts in the late evenings and the gates close by 10: 00 PM for everyone which makes it impossible to live here. Hence, I request you to change me to the faculty accommodations at the earliest. Please inform me once there is a room availability. Until then, I am shifting my stuff to my friend’s place which is close by. Faithfully, Jack Dan
Dear John,

I am writing to
let
you know the difficulties I am facing ever since I
moved
into
room
37 in the west wing hostel. I am the new football coach here and need to wake up by 4: 00 AM every morning to train students. The
room
you have allotted to me is already occupied by another sophomore from this college. I am feeling uncomfortable to
live
along with students.

Main problems: there is pandemonium in the
room
; he brings his friends to party
sometimes
and the
room
echoes with loud conversations or music which
makes
me restless in the nights. I
often
work late as I
have to
supervise the playground maintenance which
starts
in the late evenings and the gates close by 10: 00 PM for everyone which
makes
it impossible to
live
here.

Hence
, I request you to
change
me to the faculty accommodations at the earliest.
Please
inform me once there is a
room
availability. Until then, I am shifting my stuff to my friend’s place which is close by.

Faithfully
,

Jack Dan
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the si v. 5

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
178 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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