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Essay topics: You successfully passed a job interview. You are expected to start on November 15, but you will not be available on that date. Task: Write a letter to your new boss, explaining your situation, expressing your concern and suggesting solutions. v.1

Essay topics: You successfully passed a job interview. You are expected to start on November 15, but you will not be available on that date. Task: Write a letter to your new boss, explaining your situation, expressing your concern and suggesting solutions. v. 1
Dear Sir, I recently cleared a job interview of your esteemed company and its my great fortune that I get a chance to work with you. The purpose of mine to pen down this epistle is to apologise you for not coming on the joining day because of some personal issues. As, I am the only son of my parents and unfortunately my mother had an accident, yesterday. However, she is out of danger but doctors recommended her to take appropriate rest for at least two weeks because of the critical situation. Therefore, I have to take care of her, so that she will recover properly. To be honest, I feel so guilty because I am unable to attend the first day of joining. My joining date is probably 15 November and because of my mother accident I will not able to come at that day. Indeed, I am so excited for that job, as it was the dream of mine to work at your organisation and now it comes true. My mother takes only 2 weeks to recover and after that I will definitely come at work. Although, it takes four days more after 15 November but assure you that I will work diligently to make sure the breakthroughs of our company. I would be very grateful if you give me some time by extending my joining date for days later instead of 15th November. I look forward to hear from you. Yours faithfully, Amn
Dear Sir,

I recently cleared a job interview of your esteemed
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company
and
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its
my great fortune that I
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get
a chance to
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work
with you. The purpose of mine to pen down this epistle is to
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apologise
you for not coming on the
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joining
day
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because
of
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some
personal issues.

As, I am the
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only
son of my parents and unfortunately my mother had an accident, yesterday.
However
, she is out of
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danger
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but
doctors recommended her to take appropriate rest for at least two weeks
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because
of the critical situation.
Therefore
, I
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have to
take care of her,
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so
that she will recover
properly
.

To be honest, I feel
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so
guilty
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because
I am unable to attend the
first
day of
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joining
. My
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joining
date is
probably
15 November and
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because
of my mother accident I will not able to
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come
at that day.
Indeed
, I am
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so
excited for that job, as it was the dream of mine to
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work
at your
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organisation
and
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now
it
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comes
true.

My mother takes
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only
2 weeks to recover and after that I will definitely
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come
at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. Although, it takes four days more after 15 November
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but
assure you that I will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
diligently
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure the breakthroughs of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. I would be
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very
grateful if you give me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time by extending my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
joining
date for days later
instead
of 15th November.

I look forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Amn
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter Essay topics: You successfully passed a job interview. You are expected to start on November 15, but you will not be available on that date. Task: Write a letter to your new boss, explaining your situation, expressing your concern and suggesting solutions. v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
245 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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