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Essay topics: IELTS General Writing - Writing Task IYou have a new job and can no longer attend your regular English class. Write a letter to the English school. In your letter: - describe the situation- explain the problem- say what you would like to happe v.2

Essay topics: IELTS General Writing - Writing Task IYou have a new job and can no longer attend your regular English class. Write a letter to the English school. In your letter: - describe the situation- explain the problem- say what you would like to happe v. 2
Dear Director, St. Trinity School of English Language Dublin My name is John Smith and I am a student of English language in department of foreign languages in your school. I have been learning English with you for the past several months. However, at this point, I can no longer continue the course because of my new employment. I would like to inform you further that I have been accepted as a trainee software analyst by Intel Company and will be joining it by the end of next week. I need to work in my employer’s head office located in London. This is a reason why, I will soon move from Dublin to London. Pursuant to these developments, I request you to grant me permission to attend the remaining classes in your school based in London. I hope you will agree to such arrangements. I sincerely thank you for all the assistance extended by you and your school in the past. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, John Smith
Dear Director,

St. Trinity
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School
of English Language

Dublin

My name is John
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Smith and
I am a student of English language in department of foreign languages in your
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school
. I have been learning English with you for the past several months.
However
, at this point, I can no longer continue the course
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because
of my new employment.

I would like to inform you
further
that I have been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
as a trainee software analyst by Intel
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Company
and will be joining it by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of
next
week. I need to work in my employer’s head office located in London. This is a reason why, I will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
from Dublin to London.

Pursuant to these developments, I request you to grant me permission to attend the remaining classes in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
based in London. I hope you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
to such arrangements.

I
sincerely
thank you for all the assistance extended by you and your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
in the past.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
Sincerely
,

John Smith
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter Essay topics: IELTS General Writing - Writing Task IYou have a new job and can no longer attend your regular English class. Write a letter to the English school. In your letter: - describe the situation- explain the problem- say what you would like to happe v. 2

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
172 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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