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Write a letter to local suthorities by requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area Mention about the current sport facilities available what kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced how the new sports facilitie v.2

Write a letter to local suthorities by requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area Mention about the current sport facilities available what kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced how the new sports facilitie v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to request you to install additional sports provisisons for people between 25 to 30 years in our locality. Currently/Presently, the only sports available in our locality are mini golf and chess. These games are mostly played and enyoyed by older people. However, there are sports facilities available for the younger generation which they can play after their office hours. I would request you to kindly include extra sporting equipments such as badminton, cricket and lawn tennis in our colony which are more suitable for the office goers. These sports games are suitable for working people because of hours of working in office completing the projects within the deadline. By playing these sports they can not only reduce their stress level but also can keep them physically and mentally fit. I hope you will take my suggestion into consideration and will take immediate action. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Thanking you, Yours faithfully, prabhpreet Kaur.
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to request you to install additional
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sports
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provisisons
for
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people
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between 25 to 30
years in our locality.

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Currently
/
Presently
, the
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only
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sports
available in our locality are mini golf and chess. These games are
mostly
played and
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enyoyed
by older
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people
.
However
, there are
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sports
facilities available for the younger generation which they can play after their office hours.

I would request you to kindly include extra sporting equipments such as badminton, cricket and lawn tennis in our colony which are more suitable for the office goers.

These
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sports
games are suitable for working
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people
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because
of hours of working in office completing the projects within the deadline. By playing these
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sports
they can not
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only
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reduce
their
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stress
level
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but
also
can
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keep
them
physically
and mentally fit.

I hope you will take my suggestion into consideration and will take immediate action.

I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Thanking you,

Yours
faithfully
,

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prabhpreet
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Kaur
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IELTS letter Write a letter to local suthorities by requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area Mention about the current sport facilities available what kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced how the new sports facilitie v. 2

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  American English
10 paragraphs
164 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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