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You left your watch at friend's home and you want him to send it back. writer him a letter. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: describe your watchtell him where you left it atsuggest what he can do about it. v.2

You left your watch at friend's home and you want him to send it back. writer him a letter. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: describe your watchtell him where you left it atsuggest what he can do about it. v. 2
Dear Dave, Hope you are doing good. I am writing this letter to let you know that I mistakenly forgot to pick my wrist watch while I was leaving from your place. It is a Fossil smartwatch with a rose gold chain and a silver tone metallic chain. Additionally, at the backside of the dial you would find my name printed in royal blue ink. A night before, while I was packing my luggage, I kept it in one of the side drawers besides the bed in the guest room, with a thought that it will be handy next morning. Unfortunately, it completely went off my mind. I would appreciate in case you could send me the watch at my postal address. You can parcel the same through Blue Dart courier services, since they are the best delivery agents for such valuable items. Their courier facility is reliable and smooth. However, the only drawback is that, you will have to prepare the package on your own and they will secure the packet in front of you. Pay my regards to uncle and aunt, also thanks for the help. Best Wishes Jane
Dear Dave,

Hope you are doing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
. I am writing this letter to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that I
mistakenly
forgot to pick my wrist
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
while I was leaving from your place.

It is a Fossil smartwatch with a rose gold chain and a silver tone metallic chain.
Additionally
, at the backside of the dial you would find my name printed in royal blue ink.

A night
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
, while I was packing my luggage, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
it in one of the side drawers
besides
the bed in the guest room, with a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
that it will be handy
next
morning. Unfortunately, it completely went off my mind.

I would appreciate in case you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
at my postal address. You can parcel the same through Blue Dart courier services, since they are the best delivery agents for such valuable items. Their courier facility is reliable and smooth.
However
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
drawback is that, you will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
prepare the package on your
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
own and
they will secure the packet in front of you.

Pay my regards to uncle and aunt,
also
thanks for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.

Best Wishes

Jane
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter You left your watch at friend's home and you want him to send it back. writer him a letter. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: describe your watchtell him where you left it atsuggest what he can do about it. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
190 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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