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You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping center near your home. Write a letter to the council: -How you heard about the plan? -Explain how you feel about it? -Ask for more information about it? v.2

You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping center near your home. Write a letter to the council: -How you heard about the plan? -Explain how you feel about it? -Ask for more information about it? v. 2
Dear Sir, I am a resident of Valencia apartments situated at the Western Expressway and I am writing to enquire about the upcoming shopping center project. I came across the development plan while listening to the local radio station, as well as, I read about the same in the recent weekly periodical of Estate News. I am pleased that the local authorities have approved and welcomed the idea of a shopping complex in the vicinity. This would mean, the localities will no longer have to drive miles towards the downtown every weekend fetching groceries and mandatory supplies. As a curious inhabitant, I would like to know that by when we are expecting the commencement of the commercial complex. Additionally, will the shopping space be confined to brands of apparels or electronic gadgets or will the mall have hyper city or supermarket catering to daily needs. Last but not the least, during the construction phase will there be any road closures or route diversions. Looking forward for your response. Your’s faithfully Alex Jhonson
Dear Sir,

I am a resident of Valencia apartments situated at the Western
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Expressway and
I am writing to
Possible spelling mistake. 'enquire' is British English.
enquire
about the upcoming shopping center project.

I came across the development plan while listening to the local radio station,
as well
as, I read about the same in the recent weekly periodical of Estate News.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
pleased
that the local authorities have approved and welcomed the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of a shopping complex in the vicinity. This would mean, the localities will no longer
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
drive miles towards the downtown every weekend fetching groceries and mandatory supplies.

As a curious inhabitant, I would like to know that by when we are expecting the commencement of the commercial complex.
Additionally
, will the shopping space
be confined
to brands of apparels or electronic gadgets or will the mall have hyper city or supermarket catering to daily needs. Last
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not the least, during the construction phase will there be any road closures or route diversions.

Looking forward for your response.

Did you mean "Your" or "Yours"?
Your’s
faithfully


Alex
Possible spelling mistake found.
Jhonson
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping center near your home. Write a letter to the council: -How you heard about the plan? -Explain how you feel about it? -Ask for more information about it? v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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