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You are unable to complete your Couse - You have discontinued it, Write a letter to your teacher to thank him and explain - Why have you continued it? What are your reasons for thanking him/her? v.2

You are unable to complete your Couse - You have discontinued it, Write a letter to your teacher to thank him and explain - Why have you continued it? What are your reasons for thanking him/her? v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing a letter to inform you sadly that I will not be able to continue my post-graduation diploma in the Middlesex university due to a few convincing reasons back home. Let me explain to you in more detail. There are primarily two reasons why I have decided to stop my study at this juncture. The prime reason is that my father’s business is not going well as it was; therefore, he doesn’t have enough money to support my studies abroad. You must be aware that being an international student, it won’t be possible for me to continue my studies without financial help. In addition to that, I have recently been offered a full-time job-based in Lahore, Pakistan which is my hometown, hence my daily expenses would be very nominal, and this job would help me to support my family in financial crises. I would like to thank you your support to uplift my academic knowledge, and I must say that it has been an honor for me to study from a teacher someone like you who believes in humanity, has an open-door policy and provides an opportunity to their student to think out of the box solution. Yours truly, Sohail
Dear Sir,

I am writing a letter to inform you
sadly
that I will not be able to continue my post-graduation diploma in the Middlesex university due to a few convincing reasons back home.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
to you in more detail. There are
primarily
two reasons why I have decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
at this juncture. The prime reason is that my father’s business is not going well as it was;
therefore
, he doesn’t have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
money to support my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
abroad. You
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be aware that being an international student, it won’t be possible for me to continue my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
without financial
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.
In addition
to that, I have recently
been offered
a full-time job-based in Lahore, Pakistan which is my hometown,
hence
my daily expenses would be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
nominal, and this job would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me to support my family in financial crises.

I would like to thank you your support to uplift my academic knowledge, and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
say that it has been an honor for me to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
from a teacher someone like you who believes in humanity, has an open-door policy and provides an opportunity to their student to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
out of the box solution.

Yours
truly
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Sohail
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are unable to complete your Couse - You have discontinued it, Write a letter to your teacher to thank him and explain - Why have you continued it? What are your reasons for thanking him/her? v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
203 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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