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Write a letter to your friend who has just moved to a new house regarding a gift that you want to send him 1 what you will send as a gift 2 why you have chosen it 3 How you will send v.2

Write a letter to your friend who has just moved to a new house regarding a gift that you want to send him 1 what you will send as a gift 2 why you have chosen it 3 How you will send v. 2
Dear Anna, I hope you are fine, it’s such a long time since i saw you. Recently, i came to know from my aunt that you have bought a new house near shimmer lake and are going to shift there next month. I have bought a cupboard for you as a gift. I am so delighted to find that you have ultimately got your dream house. However, as you have told me, the woodwork has not been completed, i have bought a huge cupboard for you. I bought it from Chiniot furniture shop, which is best re-known for their handy craft work and expert in the home furniture. The walls and front doors are made of the Oak from Gilgit and planks are made of the cedar wood. The cupboard depicts the art work of the dynasty of Mughal era. The cupboard is divided into separate portion for clothes; children’s toys: shoes: accessories like jewelry, watches, scarves, socks, glasses- and what not. This will prove to be the ultimate solution to save all personal stuff. As there is a mirror inside the door, which has increased the delicacy of the object, so i have requested my uncle to drop it at your house by himself. So that such a special gift will not get damaged in any way by the vendor. I have told him your address. I assume you do not mind my deliberate step. He will be there tomorrow late afternoon. Best wishes, Saira
Dear Anna,

I hope you are fine, it’s such a long time since
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i
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saw
you. Recently,
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i
came to know from my aunt that you have
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bought
a new
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house
near shimmer lake and are going to shift there
next
month. I have
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bought
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cupboard
for you as a gift.

I am
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so
delighted to find that you have
ultimately
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got
your dream
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house
.
However
, as you have
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told
me, the woodwork has not
been completed
,
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i
have
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bought
a huge
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cupboard
for you. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
it from
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Chiniot
furniture shop, which is best re-known for their handy craft work and expert in the home furniture. The walls and front doors
are made
of the Oak from
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Gilgit
and planks
are made
of the cedar wood. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cupboard
depicts the art work of the dynasty of Mughal era.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cupboard
is divided
into separate portion for clothes; children’s toys: shoes: accessories like jewelry,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watches
, scarves, socks, glasses- and what not. This will prove to be the ultimate solution to save all personal stuff.

As there is a mirror inside the door, which has increased the delicacy of the object,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
have requested my uncle to drop it at your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
by himself.
“So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
So that
such a special gift will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
damaged in any way by the vendor. I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
him your address. I assume you do not mind my deliberate step. He will be there tomorrow late afternoon.

Best wishes,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Saira
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter Write a letter to your friend who has just moved to a new house regarding a gift that you want to send him 1 what you will send as a gift 2 why you have chosen it 3 How you will send v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
245 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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