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You learnt that there is self-funded vet hospital that cures various illness of animals free of cost. This hospital is struggling to raise funds these days. Write a letter to leading newspaper editor appealing the community for donation. In your letter1)Ex v.2

You learnt that there is self-funded vet hospital that cures various illness of animals free of cost. This hospital is struggling to raise funds these days. Write a letter to leading newspaper editor appealing the community for donation. In your letter1)Ex v. 2
Dear Raman, I hope you find this letter to divert your attention towards the charity hospital of animals which is struggling currently because of lack of financial budgets. I want you to publish this article in your daily tabloid. From last few years, a grant was issued by government to manage the operations of hospital, but because of new government body in town, all the financial assistance has been stopped. Therefore, hospital authorities do not have finances to purchase the food and medicines for animals. Hence, I would appreciate, if you give space to aforementioned issue in your editorial page so that people would become aware of this and can contribute to this noble cause. In the absence of funds, hospital body has to leave the pets in open and most of them have diseases which can easily infect the humankind by causing different type of viruses. What is more, most of the stray dogs which are kept here if left unattended, they can bite children and youngsters. I am looking forward to seeing this issue published in your newspaper. Your faithfully, Amrinder Singh
Dear
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Raman
,

I hope you find this letter to divert your attention towards the charity
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
of animals which is struggling
currently
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of lack of financial budgets. I want you to publish this article in your daily tabloid.

From last few years, a grant
was issued
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to manage the operations of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
body in town, all the financial assistance has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
.
Therefore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
authorities do not have finances to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
the food and medicines for animals.

Hence
, I would appreciate, if you give space to aforementioned issue in your editorial page
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would become aware of this and can contribute to this noble cause. In the absence of funds,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
body
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
the pets in open and most of them have diseases which can
easily
infect the humankind by causing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
type of viruses.
What is more
, most of the stray dogs which are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
here if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
unattended, they can bite children and youngsters.

I am looking forward to seeing this issue published in your newspaper.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Amrinder
Singh
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You learnt that there is self-funded vet hospital that cures various illness of animals free of cost. This hospital is struggling to raise funds these days. Write a letter to leading newspaper editor appealing the community for donation. In your letter1)Ex v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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