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You are living in a rented apartment, but you have found some problems with the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, you should: • say who you are• explain the problems• say what you want your landlord to do v.2

You are living in a rented apartment, but you have found some problems with the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, you should: • say who you are• explain the problems• say what you want your landlord to do v. 2
Dear Sir I am one your tenants and moved into your newly built flats last month in an apartment numbered 405. I am writing this epistle to tell you about the issues related to the furniture available in the room. First of all, I am staying in a two-seater room and sharing it with another girl student. We both have to study during night hours but there is only one set of study table and chair. So, we are facing difficulty while studying as our study hours are same. Secondly, the lock of my cupboard is not working because I am having valuable items for example laptop and it is not safe to place such items openly. I request you to fix the lock as soon as possible so that I can place my expensive things safely inside the wardrobe. Moreover, you mentioned in the rent agreement that you will provide study furniture so, arrange one more set of table and chair so that we do not have to suffer while doing our college work. Your immediate response would be appreciated. Yours sincerely Malisa Morgan
Dear Sir

I am one your tenants and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
into your
newly
built flats last month in an apartment numbered 405. I am writing this epistle to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you about the issues related to the furniture available in the room.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I am staying in a two-seater room and sharing it with another girl student. We both
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
during night hours
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
there is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one set of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
table and chair.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, we are facing difficulty while studying as our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
hours are same.
Secondly
, the lock of my cupboard is not working
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I am having valuable items
for example
laptop and it is not safe to place such items
openly
.

I request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
the lock as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can place my expensive things
safely
inside the wardrobe.
Moreover
, you mentioned in the rent agreement that you will provide
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
furniture
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, arrange one more set of table and chair
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that we do not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
suffer while doing our college work.

Your immediate response would
be appreciated
.

Yours
sincerely


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Malisa
Morgan
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You are living in a rented apartment, but you have found some problems with the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, you should: • say who you are• explain the problems• say what you want your landlord to do v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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