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Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people think that music only brings benefits to individuals and societies. Other, however, think that music can have negative influence on both. Discuss these views and give your own opi v.13

Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people think that music only brings benefits to individuals and societies. Other, however, think that music can have negative influence on both. Discuss these views and give your own opi v. 13
It is an obvious truth that music can have crucial impact on our daily life. In fact, playing variety of musics is common in community life. Some people strongly believe in the positive aspects of music, while there are some people who oppose to music. This essay deals with arguments for and against this controversial topic. On the one hand, some people proclaim, music has a great deal of benefits for people and society. First and foremost, expressing feelings through different kinds of musics become possible. Secondary, it can be named as a most significant entertainment among folk especially youth. In other words, spare times can be filled by listening to musics and sometimes it can change the mood of people to the best. On the other hand, some people tend to be against the benefits of music and reckon, it not only lack of any positive points but also contribute to catastrophic impact on society. A reason which convince them to reject music is because of coming up some new musics which are included of offensive words. So, antisocial massages can be transferred through them. In other words, catastrophic impacts can be created in case of not having an appropriate music. Another reason to reject music is wasting time. In their point of view, devoting any time to music is considered useless. In conclusion, there are different ideas about music. Some people advocate, while others disadvocate. However, it has some negative points, I tend to agree with folk who are in favor of music, because it makes more sense to me. Also, every coin has two sides, it is recommended to see the bright side. At last, if i had to choose between listening to music and other kinds of hobbies, I definitely selected music.
It is an obvious truth that
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music
can have crucial impact on our daily life. In fact, playing variety of
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musics
is common in community life.
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Some
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people
strongly
believe in the
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positive
aspects of
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music
, while there are
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some
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people
who oppose to
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music
. This essay deals with arguments for and against this controversial topic.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
proclaim,
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music
has a great deal of benefits for
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people
and society.
First
and foremost, expressing feelings through
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different
kinds of
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musics
become possible. Secondary, it can
be named
as a most significant entertainment among folk
especially
youth. In
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other
words, spare times can
be filled
by listening to
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musics
and
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sometimes
it can
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change
the mood of
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people
to the best.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
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people
tend to be against the benefits of
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music
and reckon, it not
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only
lack of any
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positive
points
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but
also
contribute to catastrophic impact on society. A reason which convince them to reject
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music
is
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because
of coming up
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some
new
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musics
which
are included
of offensive words.
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So
, antisocial massages can
be transferred
through them. In
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other
words, catastrophic impacts can
be created
in case of not having an appropriate
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music
. Another reason to reject
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music
is wasting time. In their point of view, devoting any time to
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music
is considered
useless.

In conclusion
, there are
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different
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ideas
about
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music
.
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Some
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people
advocate, while others
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disadvocate
.
However
, it has
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some
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negative
points, I tend to
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agree
with folk who are in favor of
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music
,
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because
it
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makes
more sense to me.
Also
, every coin has two sides, it
is recommended
to
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see
the bright side. At last, if
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i
had to choose between listening to
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music
and
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other
kinds of hobbies, I definitely selected
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music
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people think that music only brings benefits to individuals and societies. Other, however, think that music can have negative influence on both. Discuss these views and give your own opi v. 13

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