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You are a member of a sport club. Write a letter to the club president about an event that will be organized. In your letter, you should tell: what it iswho I am invitingwhat my role is in this event. v.2

You are a member of a sport club. Write a letter to the club president about an event that will be organized. In your letter, you should tell: what it iswho I am invitingwhat my role is in this event. v. 2
Dear Mr. President, I am writing to inform you about our plan for the upcoming event, that will be arranged at the football court of the club, on the 25th of December 2019, the second day of Christmas. Their will be a friendly football game between Team A and the old team. Before the match there is an opening ceremony, local singers and bands will play and sing Christmas songs. Then the play will take off, after you will present the trophies for all the players and coaches; at the end there is a small reception inside the basketball court for everyone. During this event, all local people and the players family are invited. Additionally, we will send an official invitation for the city Council, members and council’s employees, and a special request will be sent for Mr. Georges Shaw the parliament member from our city. All local channels will broadcast it live on TV. I would like to let you know, that I’ll be organizing and following the campaign for this event, on television, radio and social media. I need your approval to appear in some TV programs, in order to introduce the event and invite other people from new places to come and visit club. Sincerely Yours,
Dear Mr. President,

I am writing to inform you about our plan for the upcoming
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
, that will
be arranged
at the football court of the club, on the 25th of December 2019, the second day of Christmas.

Their will be a friendly football game between Team A and the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
team.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Before
the match there is an opening ceremony, local singers and bands will play and sing Christmas songs. Then the play will take off, after you will present the trophies for all the players and coaches; at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
there is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
reception inside the basketball court for everyone.

During this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
, all local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and the
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "players'" or "player's"?
players
family
are invited
.
Additionally
, we will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
an official invitation for the city Council, members and council’s employees, and a special request will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
for Mr. Georges Shaw the parliament member from our city. All local channels will broadcast it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
on TV.

I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know, that I’ll be organizing and following the campaign for this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
, on television, radio and social media. I need your approval to appear in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
TV programs, in order to introduce the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
and invite other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
from new places to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
and visit club.

Sincerely
Yours,
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are a member of a sport club. Write a letter to the club president about an event that will be organized. In your letter, you should tell: what it iswho I am invitingwhat my role is in this event. v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
209 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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