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You are looking for a part time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter Introduce your self explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skill you have v.6

You are looking for a part time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter Introduce your self explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skill you have v. 6
Dear Sir/Madam I would like to apply for a part time job through your agency. Currently I am a undergraduate student at university of Colombo whom studying information technology degree furthermore I am final year student. Actually, I would desire to gain my knowledge about software engineering field. Therefore i will hope to apply for a part time job related with software industry as a trainee software engineer or associate software engineer and also I will able to work 20 hours per week. I have six months part time work experience in most reputed company in the software field and also i engage with develop financial applications using Microsoft. Net Technologies. Furthermore I would like to say I am good team player whom properly collaborate with each other person. Finally, I attach my resume with this letter and i would hope to get positive feedback about my request. Thank you for wast your time to looking my letter and resume. your faithfully, Mohan
Dear Sir/Madam

I would like to apply for a part
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
job through your agency.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Currently
I am
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
undergraduate student at university of Colombo whom studying information technology degree
furthermore
I
Please check whether an article is missing: "am a final" or "am an final"
am final
year student.

Actually, I would desire to gain my knowledge about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
engineering field.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
Did you mean "I"?
i
will hope to apply for a part
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
job related with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
industry as a trainee
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
engineer or associate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
engineer and
also
I
Did you mean "will be able"?
will able
to work 20 hours per week.

I have six months part
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
work experience in most reputed
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
field and
also
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
engage with develop financial applications using Microsoft. Net Technologies.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Furthermore
I would like to say I am
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
team player whom
properly
collaborate with each other person.

Finally
, I attach my resume with this letter and
Did you mean "I"?
i
would hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
feedback about my request.

Thank you for wast your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
to looking my letter and resume.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
your
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Mohan
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS letter You are looking for a part time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter Introduce your self explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skill you have v. 6

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
162 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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