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General Writing Task 1 Essay topic You have seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors around your city Write a letter of application to the tourism office In the letter give your reasons for wanting the job explain why v.1

General Writing Task 1 Essay topic You have seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors around your city Write a letter of application to the tourism office In the letter give your reasons for wanting the job explain why v. 1
To the tourism office, My name is Jim and I saw an advertisement of recruiting courier for showing tourists around the city on weekends. I am interested in the job; therefore, I am writing to you to apply for the post. The reason why I apply for the job is because I am a full-time student in university, I want to earn money for my tuition on spare time. I think this job perfectly suit me. I am born in the city and live here since. Thus, I know every corner of the city and I believe I am qualified for the job. I have visited all famous sites in the city and I am familiar with every shopping center, hotel and transportation intersection. In addition, I know exactly whe most popular dish in every restaurant. Moreover, I have a car. I have been driving in last three years. I believe the capbility to drive is a essential requirment for couriers. I think I am a qualified candidate for the job. Please consider me for the post. I am looking forward to your reply and work in the post. Yours faithfully, Jim Pan
To the tourism office,

My name is Jim and I
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saw
an
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advertisement of
recruiting courier for showing tourists around the city on weekends. I
am interested
in the
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job
;
therefore
, I am writing to you to apply for the post. The reason why I apply for the
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job
is
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because
I am a full-time student in university, I want to earn money for my tuition on spare time. I
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think
this
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job
perfectly
suit me.

I
am born
in the city and
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live
here since.
Thus
, I know every corner of the city and I believe I
am qualified
for the
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job
. I have visited all
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
sites in the
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city and
I am familiar with every shopping center, hotel and transportation intersection.
In addition
, I know exactly
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whe
most popular dish in every restaurant.

Moreover
, I have a car. I have been driving in last three years. I believe the
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capbility
to drive is
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a
essential
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requirment
for couriers.
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I
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think
I am a qualified candidate for the
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job
.
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Please
consider me for the post. I am looking forward to your reply and work in the post.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jim Pan
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS letter General Writing Task 1 Essay topic You have seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors around your city Write a letter of application to the tourism office In the letter give your reasons for wanting the job explain why v. 1

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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