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30/10/2017You have seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors around your city. Write a letter of application to the tourism office. In the letter- Give your reasons for wanting the job- Explain why you think you can do v.2

30/10/2017You have seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors around your city. Write a letter of application to the tourism office. In the letter- Give your reasons for wanting the job- Explain why you think you can do v. 2
Dear Sir or madame, I am writing to express my interest in working at your firm as a local tour guide. To begin with, my entire life has been spent in this beautiful city. I feel a deep love and a connection with this place and would like to share those feelings with guests. In addition, I heard your employees are given some special training, I hope to learn something new about the megalopolis, its history, landmarks and architecture. Furthermore, I fit the job due to my personal characteristics. I am a well-educated, well-read, friendly, positive individual who likes to talk and socialize with others. Thus, clientele will be happy to work with me. Moreover, I am fluent in Russian, Greman, Spanish, Franch and can speak in Chinese and Japanese languages as well. So, I will be able to work with visitors from all over the world. Finally, I have relevant experience as well. While working in a big international company as a part-time employee I have a duty to make foreign specialists comfortable in our city. So, I frequently give them improvised tours around the city. Also, I have already worked as an assistant of a tour guide for six months about a year ago in a rival company. I am waiting for your prompt response. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear Sir or madame,

I am writing to express my interest in working at your firm as a local tour guide.

To
begin
with, my entire life has
been spent
in this
beautiful
city. I feel a deep
love
and a connection with this place and would like to share those feelings with guests.
In addition
, I heard your employees are
given
some
special training, I hope to learn something new about the megalopolis, its history, landmarks and architecture.

Furthermore
, I fit the job due to my personal characteristics. I am a well-educated, well-read, friendly,
positive
individual who likes to talk and socialize with others.
Thus
, clientele will be happy to work with me.
Moreover
, I am fluent in Russian,
Greman
, Spanish,
Franch
and can speak in Chinese and Japanese languages
as well
.
So
, I will be able to work with visitors from all over the world.

Finally
, I have relevant experience
as well
. While working in a
big
international
company
as a part-time employee I have a duty to
make
foreign specialists comfortable in our city.
So
, I
frequently
give them improvised tours around the city.
Also
, I have already worked as an assistant of a tour guide for six months about a year ago in a rival
company
.

I am waiting for your prompt response.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
Dubinchuk
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter 30/10/2017You have seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors around your city. Write a letter of application to the tourism office. In the letter- Give your reasons for wanting the job- Explain why you think you can do v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
221 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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