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write a letter to the hotel manager where you have recently seen a part-time job openingexplain to him that you would like to apply for this jobexplain your past experiencewrite to him on the preference of days and time available for this job v.2

write a letter to the hotel manager where you have recently seen a part-time job openingexplain to him that you would like to apply for this jobexplain your past experiencewrite to him on the preference of days and time available for this job v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter in reference to a recent part-time job for a customer service Manager I saw at your hotel Mandarin Oriental. I am keen to apply for this role. Could you please let me know the procedure? . I have a total work experience of three years as a customer service executive at a local restaurant " The West" . My role includes taking care of customer grievances by enabling better services offering. I was also given the responsibility to coordinate with a software firm to create an online website which included various features like online booking, customer feedback and complaints etc. I hope my previous experience will be invaluable to the new role. Since this is a part-time role I would be more interested in the evening slots on Monday to Friday as in the daytime I have to go for my classes as I am studying at a local university. I hope to get a due consideration for this role. Yours Sincerely, Vinson
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter in reference to a recent part-time job for a
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customer
service Manager I
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saw
at your hotel Mandarin Oriental. I am keen to apply for this role. Could you
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please
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let
me know the procedure?
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I have a total work experience of three years as a
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customer
service executive at a local restaurant
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; The
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West&quot
;
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
My role includes taking care of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
grievances by enabling better services offering. I was
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
the responsibility to coordinate with a software firm to create an online website which included various features like online booking,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
feedback and complaints etc. I hope my previous experience will be invaluable to the new role.

Since this is a part-time role I would be more interested in the evening slots on Monday to Friday as in the daytime I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
go for my classes as I am studying at a local university.

I hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a due consideration for this role.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Vinson
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter write a letter to the hotel manager where you have recently seen a part-time job openingexplain to him that you would like to apply for this jobexplain your past experiencewrite to him on the preference of days and time available for this job v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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