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You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays You decide to apply for the job Write a letter to the director of the Museum In your letter introduce yourself explain what experience and v.9

You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays You decide to apply for the job Write a letter to the director of the Museum In your letter introduce yourself explain what experience and v. 9
Dear sir, I am writing this to apply for a job in the City Museum shop during my vacation time. I came to notice about this opportunity today morning, while going through an English newspaper. As this job advertisement suits my capability and skills thought to apply for this position. I am Ria, my age is 22 and completed my Master' s in History department. During my educational period I have scored distinction in all my semesters. Also, I have done my thesis on ancient monuments during my master’s education. In my perception, practical knowledge is equally important along with the academic studies. Therefore, I have also given a brief presentation to my lecturers after completing my research and got my appraisals from them for the way I have gathered the information and the way of explaining it to them. Basically, I am so much interested to know about our history in detail even if it is about clothing, accessories, the way of living and so on. Even with respect to the interest of sharing my knowledge to others, I felt excited to apply for this job. It would be appreciated if you could consider me for this post. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Thanking you. Yours faithfully, Abc.
Dear sir,

I am writing this to apply for a job in the City Museum shop during my vacation time. I came to notice about this opportunity
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today morning
, while going through an English newspaper. As this job advertisement suits my capability and
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skills
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thought
to apply for this position.

I am
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Ria
, my age is 22 and completed my
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Master&
#039; s in History department. During my educational period I have scored distinction in all my semesters.
Also
, I have done my thesis on ancient monuments during my master’s education. In my perception, practical knowledge is
equally
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important
along with the academic studies.
Therefore
, I have
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
a brief presentation to my lecturers after completing my research and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
my appraisals from them for the way I have gathered the information and the way of explaining it to them.

Basically
, I am
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so
much interested to know about our history in detail even if it is about clothing, accessories, the way of living and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.

Even with respect to the interest of sharing my knowledge to others, I felt excited to apply for this job. It would
be appreciated
if you could consider me for this post.

I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Thanking you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Abc
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5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays You decide to apply for the job Write a letter to the director of the Museum In your letter introduce yourself explain what experience and v. 9

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
212 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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