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You will go to London soon to stay there for one year Write a letter to an agency to get information about accommodation In your letter you should say why you are going to London what kind of accommodation you want when you will arrive v.2

You will go to London soon to stay there for one year Write a letter to an agency to get information about accommodation In your letter you should say why you are going to London what kind of accommodation you want when you will arrive v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this to request you for finding accommodation for me to stay in London. My name is john and I am 26 years coming to London based on a project in my company. As this is the first time I' m visiting to UK and totally unaware of that place. Also, I don' t have any friends or relatives there so, I thought to consult your agency based on your ratings found in online for finding suitable place to stay there. I am coming to London to stay for one year. Actually, my company is offering me a studio apartment for 15 days during my initial days. SO, I want an accommodation for later that too prefer to stay nearby office which saves my time. I don' t mind even to share a room with male. It would be happy if the house is near to substation and the grocery stores. I will be reaching there on 7th March at 10 am. My colleague is coming to airport to receive me as this is the first time. I hope you can find me a better accommodation at the time I reach there. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Thanking you. Yours faithfully, Abc.
Dear Sir,

I am writing this to request you for finding accommodation for me to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stay
in London. My name is
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
john and
I am 26 years coming to London based on a project in my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. As this is the
first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
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I&
#039; m visiting to UK and
totally
unaware of that place.
Also
, I
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don&
#039; t have any friends or relatives there
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so
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
to consult your agency based on your ratings found in online for finding suitable place to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stay
there.

I am coming to London to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stay
for one year. Actually, my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
is offering me a studio apartment for 15 days during my initial days.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
SO
, I want
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "accommodation".
an accommodation
for later that
Did you mean "to prefer"?
too prefer
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stay
nearby office which saves my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. I
Possible spelling mistake found.
don&
#039; t mind even to share a room with male. It would be happy if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
is near to substation and the grocery stores.

I will be reaching there on 7th March at 10 am. My colleague is coming to airport to receive me as this is the
first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. I hope you can find me a better accommodation at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
I reach there.

I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. Thanking you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Abc
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter You will go to London soon to stay there for one year Write a letter to an agency to get information about accommodation In your letter you should say why you are going to London what kind of accommodation you want when you will arrive v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
209 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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