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You have seen an advertisement for a 'weekend work' in a hotel in the town where you are staying. You have worked in a hotel before and think that the job would be suitable for you. Now you want to apply for the job. v.1

You have seen an advertisement for a 'weekend work' in a hotel in the town where you are staying. You have worked in a hotel before and think that the job would be suitable for you. Now you want to apply for the job. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for the part-time weekend job at your hotel that you advertised in the daily Sunday Times on 5th February 2020. I have similar job experiences and I am hoping that you would look at my resume which I am attaching to this letter and consider me for the job. I am Preeti Ghuraiya, studying general management course at Garden City College, Bangalore and I can fluently speak English and Hindi. This job opportunity looks very interesting and something in-line with my work experience. I have worked as a receptionist and a front desk executive with Hotel Holiday Inn in Delhi from June 2017 till July 2019. I was responsible for interacting with clients, handling client check-in and checkout and so on. I also have some experience as a waitress. I believe my job experience would help me perform my responsibilities effectively in your hotel. The job description in the newspaper does not give details of the responsibilities. Would you be able to let me know about the duties that I will be required to do and if you require any specific skills? I can start immediately and can work for the whole day every weekend. Please let me know if you need further information regarding my job experience and education. I will be able to provide references for my experience. Looking forward to meeting you to discuss further. Yours faithfully, Preeti Arora
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply for the part-time weekend
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job
at your hotel that you advertised in the daily Sunday Times on 5th February 2020. I have similar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
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experiences and
I am hoping that you would look at my resume which I am attaching to this letter and consider me for the job.

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I
am Preeti
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Ghuraiya
, studying general management course at Garden City College, Bangalore and I can
fluently
speak English and Hindi. This
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job
opportunity looks
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very
interesting and something in-line with my work experience.

I have worked as a receptionist and a front desk executive with Hotel Holiday Inn in Delhi from June 2017 till July 2019. I was responsible for interacting with clients, handling client
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check
-in and checkout and
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so
on.
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I
also
have
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some
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experience
as a waitress.
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I
believe my
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job
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experience
would
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help
me perform my responsibilities
effectively
in your hotel.

The
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job
description in the newspaper does not give
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details
of the responsibilities. Would you be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know about the duties that I will
be required
to do and if you require any specific
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skills
? I can
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start
immediately and can work for the whole day every weekend.

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Please
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let
me know if you need
further
information regarding my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
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experience
and education. I will be able to provide references for my experience.

Looking forward to meeting you to discuss
further
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Preeti
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Arora
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement for a 'weekend work' in a hotel in the town where you are staying. You have worked in a hotel before and think that the job would be suitable for you. Now you want to apply for the job. v. 1

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
240 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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