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08/11/2017You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant's manager. In your letter, . explain that you would like to apply for the job. give some details of any relevant experience that you have. v.1

08/11/2017You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant's manager. In your letter, . explain that you would like to apply for the job. give some details of any relevant experience that you have. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madame, I am writing to express my interest in having a part-time job as a waiter in your restaurant. Your place is conveniently situated near a multi-story building where I rent an apartment; moreover, in the advertisement, you promised to pay a considerable wage to those who will work well with clientele. Previously, I have worked in three restaurants as a waiter and an assistant of a cook. Working at those great places taught me to be polite, respectful, quick and developed in me a decent memory and a desire to acquire novel knowledge and experience. To prove my words, I have references from my former employers with telephone numbers. Finally, nowadays I study at university and pursue a master degree in management and finances. Thus, I can devote my weekdays’ evenings to the work. I am available from Monday to Friday and can be at the workplace as early as 6: 00 pm. In addition, the number of assignments will significantly decline in the next month and I will be able to work during weekends as well. Unfortunately, the hours when I will be available are unknown. I am waiting for your prompt response. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear Sir or Madame,

I am writing to express my interest in having a part-time job as a waiter in your restaurant. Your place is
conveniently
situated near a multi-story building where I rent an apartment;
moreover
, in the advertisement, you promised to pay a considerable wage to those who will work well with clientele.

Previously, I have worked in three restaurants as a waiter and an assistant of a cook. Working at those great places taught me to be polite, respectful, quick and developed in me a decent memory and a desire to acquire novel knowledge and experience. To prove my words, I have references from my former employers with telephone numbers.

Finally
, nowadays I study at university and pursue a master degree in management and finances.
Thus
, I can devote my weekdays’ evenings to the work. I am available from Monday to Friday and can be at the workplace as early as 6: 00 pm.
In addition
, the number of assignments will
significantly
decline in the
next
month and I will be able to work during weekends
as well
. Unfortunately, the hours when I will be available are unknown.

I am waiting for your prompt response.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
Dubinchuk
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter 08/11/2017You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant's manager. In your letter, . explain that you would like to apply for the job. give some details of any relevant experience that you have. v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
202 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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