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You have seen an advertisement for a community college that needs teachers for night classes. Write a letter to the community college. In your letter: say which advertisement you are answeringdescribe which course(s) you want to teach, and what it/they woul v.1

You have seen an advertisement for a community college that needs teachers for night classes. Write a letter to the community college. In your letter: say which advertisement you are answeringdescribe which course(s) you want to teach, and what it/they woul v. 1
Dear John, This is in response to your recent advertisement about the need for a night teacher in your community college. I had seen this advert on 22/08/2019 in the Herald newspaper. I would like to take up Business Communications classes for the working-class employees. This is a very good opportunity for salesmen, call centre executives and shop vendors to join this 8 weeks course. Here, I will be able to teach them how to speak business English proficiently. This will help them to thrive in their workplaces as they will be able to interact freely with customers or clients and clarify their doubts with clear-cut explanations about the advantages in the products they are selling. Similarly, they will be able to suggest on the spot resolutions in case of a complaint e. g. insurance agents will be able to explain every detail and loopholes in the contract by the use of technical jargon from the curriculum. I am applying with alacrity, meaning, with speed and eagerness to fill in this job role because I am very sure that students will easily understand my pedagogy composed of lectures, notes and computer learning. This is a lucrative; a profitable idea which will make your college more reputable. I have enclosed a demonstration session in this email. Faithfully, Jack Dan
Dear John,

This is in response to your recent advertisement about the need for a night teacher in your community college. I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
this advert on 22/08/2019 in the Herald newspaper.

I would like to take up Business Communications classes for the working-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
employees. This is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
opportunity for salesmen, call
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
executives and shop vendors to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
this 8 weeks course. Here, I will be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
able
to teach them how to speak business English
proficiently
. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to thrive in their workplaces as they will be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
able
to interact
freely
with customers or clients and clarify their doubts with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
explanations about the advantages in the products they are selling.
Similarly
, they will be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
able
to suggest on the spot resolutions in case of a complaint
There should be no space here: "e.g.".
e. g.
insurance agents will be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
able
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
every detail and loopholes in the contract by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of technical jargon from the curriculum.

I am applying with alacrity, meaning, with speed and eagerness to fill in this job role
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
sure that students will
easily
understand my pedagogy composed of lectures, notes and computer learning. This is a lucrative; a profitable
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
your college more reputable.

I have enclosed a demonstration session in this email.

Faithfully
,

Jack Dan
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement for a community college that needs teachers for night classes. Write a letter to the community college. In your letter: say which advertisement you are answeringdescribe which course(s) you want to teach, and what it/they woul v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
217 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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