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our family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. In the letter: •explain why you would like your son to attend this school•describe his past academic achievements•desc v.2

our family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. In the letter: •explain why you would like your son to attend this school•describe his past academic achievements•desc v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inquire about the admission criteria in your school as I seek an institute with good curriculum for my child. My family will soon relocate to Brampton because my husband has been promoted in his current organization. I am keen to admit my child in your learning center as it is located at a 10 minutes distance from my new residence and has a strong reputation in the society. Fortunately, my child is a scholar in math’s and has attained success in various competitions. In addition, he is a national level swimmer and he had represented his school in Olympics. At the moment he is passionate about indoor sports because of which he is pursuing training in table tennis and chess. Moreover, he has recently developed a taste to learn algorithms as well as quick maths. Hence, I feel he will be a value addition to your school because of his talent and dedication. I look forward to seeing your positive response. Yours faithfully, Jessica ayri
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inquire about the admission criteria in your school as I seek an institute with
good
curriculum for my child.

My family will
soon
relocate to Brampton
because
my husband has
been promoted
in his
current
organization. I am keen to admit my child in your learning center as it
is located
at a 10 minutes distance from my new residence and has a strong reputation in the society.

Fortunately
, my child is a scholar in math’s and has attained success in various competitions.
In addition
, he is a national level
swimmer and
he had represented his school in Olympics.

At the moment he is passionate about indoor sports
because
of which he is pursuing training in table tennis and chess.
Moreover
, he has recently developed a taste to learn algorithms
as well
as quick
maths
.
Hence
, I feel he will be a value addition to your school
because
of his talent and dedication.

I look forward to seeing your
positive
response.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jessica
ayri
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter our family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. In the letter: •explain why you would like your son to attend this school•describe his past academic achievements•desc v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
172 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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