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Museums and art galleries should concentrate on works that show history and culture of their own country rather than works of other parts in the world. Agree or disagree v.4

Museums and art galleries should concentrate on works that show history and culture of their own country rather than works of other parts in the world. Agree or disagree v. 4
Most people believe that exhibition rooms should pay attention to national artworks which illustrate history and culture of this religion rather than international pieces of art. In my opinion, I totally agree with this statement and I will explain in the essay. First of all, it’s particularly important that the main mission for each country is artworks' conservation and development of them. Pieces of art describe tradition, culture, history, people’s life of each country through materials which made they have their own features by artists’ creations. Furthermore, art does not only works but also ideals, nation elites so pieces of art' s protection illustrate the big love of inhabitants who live in this country. Another point is the evolving global work of arts. Although these artworks illustrate art' s development, international history, and human' s struggles all around the world, but it extremely that these works actually make bored with customers because of popularity. Besides, most viewers when they visit exhibition rooms in another country, they want to discover new things which their country don' t have and they want to gain more knowledge about the typical features of this country such as culture, history and inhabitants' life. In conclusion, most people prefer concentration on national works than international pieces of art. Overall, I extremely agree with this opinion.
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believe that exhibition rooms should pay attention to national artworks which illustrate
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history
and culture of this religion
rather
than international
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pieces
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art
. In my opinion, I
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in the essay.

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important
that the main mission for each
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country
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artworks&
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art
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describe
tradition, culture,
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history
,
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people
’s life of each
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country
through materials which made they have their
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own
features by artists’ creations.
Furthermore
,
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art
does not
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works
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also
ideals, nation elites
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of inhabitants who
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in this country.

Another point is the evolving global
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arts
. Although these artworks illustrate
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art&
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history
, and
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human&
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it
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that these works actually
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make
bored with customers
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of popularity.
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, most viewers when they visit exhibition rooms in another
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country
, they want to discover new things which their
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country
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don&
#039; t
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have and
they want to gain more knowledge about the typical features of this
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country
such as culture,
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history
and
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inhabitants&
#039; life.

In conclusion
, most
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people
prefer concentration on national works than international
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pieces
of
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art
.
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, I
extremely
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agree
with this opinion.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS letter Museums and art galleries should concentrate on works that show history and culture of their own country rather than works of other parts in the world. Agree or disagree v. 4

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
219 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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