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You have recently joined to a new job. Write a letter to your English-speaking friend. In your letterExplain why u moved from previous jobDescribe your new jobTell your friend any news you want to share v.2

You have recently joined to a new job. Write a letter to your English-speaking friend. In your letterExplain why u moved from previous jobDescribe your new jobTell your friend any news you want to share v. 2
Dear Alice, How are you doing? It’s been a long while since we communicated. I have a great news to share from my end. Didn' t I tell you about the job opening at Venice Solutions? I cleared all rounds of interviews and now selected as a UI Designer, working since last week. I was held up with certain issues here, so couldn’t inform you. As you know, my previous job was purely occupied with intense work pressure. The constant requirement of production support during weekends made me go mad. To add on, our working hours rose to more than 10 hours per day. I couldn’t tolerate this situation and decided to take a wise decision to move in here. And you know what? I’m loving my new job. The organisation follows a fixed number of working hours and proper delegation of work for all its employees. Also, the new office is only about 10 miles from my home. They offer a decent package with good benefits. I’m really happy to be working for this organisation. Are you having any plans this weekend? If yes, then cancel them right away because I’m planning to host a party to our close buddies at my home. Do make it without any excuses. Waiting to hear from you. Best wishes, Krithika.
Dear Alice,

How are you doing? It’s been a long while since we communicated. I have
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "great news".
a great news
to share from my
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end
.
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Didn&
#039; t I
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tell
you about the job opening at Venice Solutions? I cleared all rounds of interviews and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
selected as a UI Designer,
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working
since last week. I
was held
up with certain issues here,
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so
couldn’t inform you. As you know, my previous job was
purely
occupied with intense work pressure. The constant requirement of production support during weekends made me go mad. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
on, our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
hours rose to more than 10 hours per day. I couldn’t tolerate this situation and decided to take a wise decision to
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move
in here.

And you know what? I’
The verb 'loving' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
m loving
my new job. The
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organisation
follows a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fixed
number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
hours and proper delegation of work for all its employees.
Also
, the new office is
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only
about
Writing for an international audience? Consider adding the metric equivalent.
10 miles
from my home. They offer a decent package with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
benefits. I’m
really
happy to be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
for this
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
.

Are you having any plans this weekend? If yes, then cancel them right away
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I’m planning to host a party to our close buddies at my home. Do
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it without any excuses. Waiting to hear from you.

Best wishes,

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Krithika
.
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7Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have recently joined to a new job. Write a letter to your English-speaking friend. In your letterExplain why u moved from previous jobDescribe your new jobTell your friend any news you want to share v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
218 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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