Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to convey the issues that I have been facing in your sports club.
I did join the club a month ago, having the intention to get proper guidance and become a professional bodybuilder to compete at the international level. Although I have been assigned an instructor to guide, he already had the number of students in the club; therefore, I am not getting full attention from him to build muscle. Whereas, it is compulsory for a bodybuilder to have proper guidance with a dietary requirement from a professional instructor to build muscle and subsequently take part in the competition. Besides, he usually came late in the club which is another issue as I have fixed timing for exercise due to office commitments.
I would suggest if you could reduce the number of students in one section, so I would be able to get full guidance from him to achieve my target. Also, appreciate it if you could advise him to attend the class on time as it would help me to complete my workout, and reach the office on time.
I hope to receive a position reply
Best Regards, 
Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to convey the issues that I have been facing in your sports club.
I did  
join
 the club a month ago, having the intention to  
get
 proper guidance and become a professional bodybuilder to compete at the international level. Although I have  
been assigned
 an instructor to guide, he already had the number of students in the club;  
therefore
, I am not getting full attention from him to build muscle. Whereas, it is compulsory for a bodybuilder to have proper guidance with a dietary requirement from a professional instructor to build muscle and  
subsequently
  take part
 in the competition.  
Besides
, he  
usually
 came late in the club which is another issue as I have  
fixed
 timing for exercise due to office commitments.
I would suggest if you could  
reduce
 the number of students in one section,  
so
 I would be able to  
get
 full guidance from him to achieve my target.  
Also
, appreciate it if you could advise him to attend the  
class
 on time as it would  
help
 me to complete my workout, and reach the office on time.
I hope to receive a position reply
Best Regards, 
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