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The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
The pie charts give an analysis of the expenditure of a UK based school in the years 1981, 1991 and 2001. From the given data, it can be seen that the school spent most of its annual budget on salaries. It is also seen that some avenues of expenditure such as furniture and equipment showed a fluctuating spending pattern, while spending on insurance showed a steady increase. It can be seen that in all the three years, the school spent more than two-third of its budget on salaries of teaching and non-teaching staff. While the spending on teachers’ salaries was 40% in 1981, it rose to 50% in 1991. In 2001, teachers’ salaries accounted for 45% of the total expenditure of the school. On the other hand, the monetary allocation for resources fell from 15% in 1981 to 9% in 1991. The budgetary allocation for furniture and insurance showed an increase in (write: during) the period in review. The expenditure for insurance increased from 2% in 1981 to 8% in 2001. Meanwhile, the spending on furniture and equipment rose from 15% in 1981 to 23% in 2001; however, this sector showed a fall in investment of 5% in 1991.
The pie charts give an analysis of the
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of a UK based
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school
in the years 1981, 1991 and 2001. From the
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data, it can be
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that the
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school
spent most of its annual budget on
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salaries
. It is
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some
avenues of
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expenditure
such as furniture and equipment
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showed
a fluctuating
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spending
pattern, while
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spending
on insurance
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showed
a steady increase.

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seen
that in all the three years, the
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school
spent more than two-third of its budget on
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salaries
of teaching and non-teaching staff. While the
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spending
on teachers’
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salaries
was 40% in 1981, it rose to 50% in 1991. In 2001, teachers’
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salaries
accounted for 45% of the total
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expenditure
of the
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school
.
On the other hand
, the monetary allocation for resources fell from 15% in 1981 to 9% in 1991. The budgetary allocation for furniture and insurance
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showed
an increase in (write: during) the period in review. The
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expenditure
for insurance increased from 2% in 1981 to 8% in 2001. Meanwhile, the
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spending
on furniture and equipment rose from 15% in 1981 to 23% in 2001;
however
, this sector
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showed
a fall in investment of 5% in 1991.
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20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS letter The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

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2 paragraphs
199 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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