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A year ago, you became a member of your local film club. You have decided that you do not want to continue your membership for another year. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letterstate what type of membership you have and how you have paid fo v.2

A year ago, you became a member of your local film club. You have decided that you do not want to continue your membership for another year. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letterstate what type of membership you have and how you have paid fo v. 2
Dear Mr Peter, It has been an honour to be a part of your film club since last year as I have learned a lot from this place. The purpose of writing this missive is to withdraw my membership because of some personal reasons. While enrolling for the Prime membership, it was my ultimate objective to learn basic skills of acting. I have to say that it was an inexplicable experience being a student here and the investment was worth a million dollars. The first year premium was two hundred dollars, including taxes, and I found it value for money. The prime enrolment comes up with the plethora of benefits such as acting classes, passes of night shows and a ticket to The National Film Festival. Although I was busy throughout the year and was not able to extract the best out of your firm, it was one of the mesmerising moments to be a part of the film festival. Additionally, it was memorable to participate in The Hamlet last summer, where I performed on the stage for the first time. Despite the commendable services of this institute, it is regrettable to express that I have been transferred to a new city, which gives me no choice but to relocate next month. Hoping to be a part of this remarkable facility again. Kind Regards, Charanjit Nanda
Dear Mr Peter,

It has been an
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honour
to be a part of your film club since last year as I have learned a lot from this place. The purpose of writing this missive is to withdraw my membership
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
personal reasons.

While enrolling for the Prime membership, it was my ultimate objective to learn basic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
of acting. I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
say that it was an inexplicable experience being a student here and the investment was worth a million dollars. The
first
year premium was two hundred dollars, including taxes, and I found it value for money.

The prime
Possible spelling mistake. 'enrolment' is British English.
enrolment
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
up with the plethora of benefits such as acting classes, passes of night
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
and a ticket to The National Film Festival. Although I was busy throughout the year and was not able to extract the best out of your firm, it was one of the
Possible spelling mistake. 'mesmerising' is British English.
mesmerising
moments to be a part of the film festival.
Additionally
, it was memorable to participate in The Hamlet last summer, where I performed on the stage for the
first
time.

Despite the commendable services of this institute, it is regrettable to express that I have
been transferred
to a new city, which gives me no choice
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
to relocate
next
month.

Hoping to be a part of this remarkable facility again.

Kind Regards,

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Charanjit
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Nanda
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter A year ago, you became a member of your local film club. You have decided that you do not want to continue your membership for another year. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letterstate what type of membership you have and how you have paid fo v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
225 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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