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One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him at the airport on time. Write a letter asking him to wait for you at the airport and tell him how to identify you. v.10

One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him at the airport on time. Write a letter asking him to wait for you at the airport and tell him how to identify you. v. 10
Dear Sally, Hi How are you? I am doing okay here. I am writing to you because I will be a bit late to pick you up when you arrive here at Manila. I am already excited since that you finally accepted to visit me here in Manila. Unfortunately I have some errands to go to so I am going to pick you up in the airport around 1: 00pm that is 30 minutes late. Do not worry since that I will try my best to arrive at airport as fast as I can. You can wait for me at a coffee shop in front of the airport and tell me how can I recognize that it was you. What kind of clothing will you wear? or the color of your scarf? I will wear a red scarf with a Manchester United logo so that you identify me much faster. You can call me in this number 09928731723 or email me at bill@mail. com when you arrive here in Manila. Okay, I look forward seeing you. Best wishes, Bill
Dear Sally,

Hi How are you? I am doing okay here. I am writing to you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I will be a bit late to pick you up when you arrive here at Manila.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am already excited since that you
finally
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
to visit me here in Manila. Unfortunately I have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
errands to go to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I am going to pick you up in the airport around 1: 00pm
that is
30 minutes late.

Do not worry since that I will try my best to arrive at airport as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
as I can. You can wait for me at a coffee shop in front of the airport and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
me how can I recognize that it was you. What kind of clothing will you wear?
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
or
the color of your scarf? I will wear a red scarf with a Manchester United logo
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that you identify me much faster.

You can call me in this number 09928731723 or email me at
Possible spelling mistake found.
bill@mail
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
com
when you arrive here in Manila.

Okay, I look forward seeing you.

Best wishes,

Bill
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him at the airport on time. Write a letter asking him to wait for you at the airport and tell him how to identify you. v. 10

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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