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You have a full time job and also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, -describe the situation-explain why you cannot continue at this time-say what action you w v.2

You have a full time job and also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, -describe the situation-explain why you cannot continue at this time-say what action you w v. 2
Dear Eric, How are you doing? I hope this letter finds you doing well. I am writing to tell you that I am afraid I have to quit the writing course you teaching me. As you are aware of, I have a full-time job during the day in a factory and I also attend your writing class every Friday, Saturday and Sunday evening. The job and the course leave just enough free time for myself. However, an accident happened to my close friend and I need to quit the course for this sake. My close friend Tim is hospitalized because of a car accident. I have to take care of him every night from 7 PM to 6 AM because he has no family in this city. In the daytime, he can ask nurses and other patients for help in his personal matters. Nonetheless, it is inconvenient and difficult to find someone to give a hand after night. Therefore, I have to quit my writing course and take care of him every night. I will quit my tuition this Saturday. Sorry for my abrupt decision. All the best Jim
Dear Eric,

How are you doing? I hope this letter finds you doing well. I am
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writing
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tell
you that I am afraid I
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have to
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quit
the
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writing
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course
Did you mean "you're teaching", "you are teaching", or "you were teaching"?
you teaching
me.

As you are aware of, I have a full-time job during the day in a factory and I
also
attend your
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writing
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class
every Friday, Saturday and Sunday evening. The job and the
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course
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leave
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just
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enough
free time for myself.
However
, an accident happened to my close friend and I need to
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quit
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
for this sake.

My close friend Tim
is hospitalized
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because
of a car accident. I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
take care of him every night from 7 PM to 6 AM
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
he has no family in this city. In the daytime, he can ask nurses and other patients for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in his personal matters. Nonetheless, it is inconvenient and difficult to find someone to give a hand after night.
Therefore
, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quit
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
writing
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course
and take care of him every night.

I will
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quit
my tuition this Saturday. Sorry for my abrupt decision.

All the best

Jim
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have a full time job and also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, -describe the situation-explain why you cannot continue at this time-say what action you w v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
188 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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