Dear Mr. Smith,
I am writing to inform you that I will no longer attend the course.
I work in an insurance company and the boss told me that taking a Business English course would considerably increase my chances on getting promoted to a manager position. It appears that studying the course for two terms has just paid off because one week ago I was promoted to a new post – the head of human resources department.
Although continue studying is desirable, it appears impossible. Firstly, the novel job often requires working extended hours and now my working hours overlap with the studying. Secondly, my new work assumes a lot of travelling around the country and abroad.
Finally, I would like to get a full refund for the next term because the money was paid in advance; it will be convenient to get the whole sum on my credit card. I would also like to sell textbooks for a half of their price, maybe some of your students would like to buy them.
I am waiting for your prompt response.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk
Dear Mr. Smith,
I am writing to inform you that I will no longer attend the course.
I work in an insurance
company
and the boss
told
me that taking a Business English course would
considerably
increase my chances on getting promoted to a manager position. It appears that studying the course for two terms has
just
paid off
because
one week ago I
was promoted
to a new post
–
the head of human resources department.
Although continue studying is desirable, it appears impossible.
Firstly
, the novel job
often
requires working extended hours and
now
my working hours overlap with the studying.
Secondly
, my new work assumes
a lot of
travelling around the country and abroad.
Finally
, I would like to
get
a full refund for the
next
term
because
the money
was paid
in advance; it will be convenient to
get
the whole sum on my credit card. I would
also
like to sell textbooks for a half of their price, maybe
some
of your students would like to
buy
them.
I am waiting for your prompt response.
Sincerely
yours,
Eugene
Dubinchuk
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