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08/11/2017You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. Say where you think you left the papers. Explain why they are so importantTel v.2

08/11/2017You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. Say where you think you left the papers. Explain why they are so importantTel v. 2
Dear Sir or Madame, I am writing to ask you about a favour. On 29th October 2017, my company held a conference with our investors in your hotel. At the end of this important meeting, an agreement was signed with our Japanese partners. This contract was handed to me but it appears I left it in the hotel. There are two possible locations where the document might have been left. Firstly, I would like you looked at a receptionist desk because my colleagues and I were in a hurry when we checked out and the papers could be forgotten there. Another possible place is my room. Perhaps, the document is safely preserved on a coffee table. Those papers are so important because this is a pivotal contract for our company that could pave a way to bigger contracts. Asking the partners to sign the document again will be seen as a demonstration of disrespect and poor discipline in our firm. In addition, the Japanese group flew to Japan, and it will cost a small fortune to meet them in person because airplane tickets cost about four thousand and five hundred dollars per person in each direction. I would like that you contacted me as soon as you find the lost agreement. Then it can be sent to my office via DHL express or one of my co-workers who lives in your area can deliver the contract to me personally. Please inform me what you prefer. I am waiting for your prompt response. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear Sir or Madame,

I am writing to ask you about a
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
. On 29th October 2017, my
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company
held a conference with our investors in your hotel. At the
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end
of this
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important
meeting, an agreement
was signed
with our Japanese partners. This
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contract
was handed
to me
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but
it appears I
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left
it in the hotel. There are two possible locations where the document might have been
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left
.
Firstly
, I would like you looked at a receptionist desk
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because
my colleagues and I were in a hurry when we
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checked
Did you mean "our"?
out
and the papers could
be forgotten
there. Another possible place is my room. Perhaps, the document is
safely
preserved on a coffee table.

Those papers are
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so
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important
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because
this is a pivotal
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contract
for our
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company
that could pave a way to bigger
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contracts
. Asking the partners to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sign
the document again will be
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seen
as a demonstration of disrespect and poor discipline in our firm.
In addition
, the Japanese group flew to Japan, and it will cost a
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small
fortune to
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meet
them in person
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because
airplane tickets cost about four thousand and five hundred dollars per person in each direction.

I would like that you contacted me as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as you find the lost agreement. Then it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to my office via DHL express or one of my co-workers who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
in your area can deliver the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
contract
to me
personally
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
inform me what you prefer.

I am waiting for your prompt response.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
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Dubinchuk
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter 08/11/2017You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. Say where you think you left the papers. Explain why they are so importantTel v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
256 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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