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You have received a letter about winning a prize in a competition organised by the media house, but didn’t receive that prize. Write a letter to the editor of a newspaper about it and say– Describe the competition and prize in details. – How do you f v.2

You have received a letter about winning a prize in a competition organised by the media house, but didn’t receive that prize. Write a letter to the editor of a newspaper about it and say– Describe the competition and prize in details. – How do you f v. 2
Dear Editor, I am writing in connection with the competition which was arranged and hosted by the media house and we have met there. The competition was on who can name all Iran’s province names within a minute and it occurred at Pars Hotel in Shiraz on 23/04/2019. I have participated in the competition and I won the first prize, but unfortunately, I have not yet received the prize which was a cheque with a value of 1000$. It supposed to be delivered to me at my address on 01/06/2019. It is now 01/07/2019 and I have not got anything yet. Could you make a contact with the organizer and do a follow up as you have a close connection with them? I hope with your help I can receive this prize as in my current financial situation I need this money to be able to pay my next rent. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Sorena Ashkani.
Dear Editor,

I am writing in connection with the competition which
was arranged
and hosted by the media
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
house and
we have met there. The competition was on who can name all Iran’s province names within a minute and it occurred at Pars Hotel in Shiraz on 23/04/2019.

I have participated in the competition and I won the
first
prize,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
unfortunately, I have not
yet
received the prize which was a
Possible spelling mistake. 'cheque' is British English.
cheque
with a value of
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$1000".
1000$
. It supposed to
be delivered
to me at my address on 01/06/2019. It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
01/07/2019 and I have not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
anything
yet
.

Could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a contact with the organizer and do a follow up as you have a close connection with them? I hope with your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
I can receive this prize as in my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
financial situation I need this money to be able to pay my
next
rent.

I look forward to hearing from you as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible.

Yours
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Sorena
Possible spelling mistake found.
Ashkani
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You have received a letter about winning a prize in a competition organised by the media house, but didn’t receive that prize. Write a letter to the editor of a newspaper about it and say– Describe the competition and prize in details. – How do you f v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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