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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter with regard to a prize for amateur writers at Thanh Nien newspaper. I received a call from the newspaper’s headquarter informing that I won the first prize for the contest held to discover new writers last month. M v.1

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter with regard to a prize for amateur writers at Thanh Nien newspaper. I received a call from the newspaper’s headquarter informing that I won the first prize for the contest held to discover new writers last month. M v. 1
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter with regard to a prize for amateur writers at Thanh Nien newspaper. I received a call from the newspaper’s headquarter last month informing that I won the first prize for the writing contest. my submission was chosen and posted in the science section of the volume published on May 25th. my prize was 2 million Vietnam dongs along with a contract to work at your newspaper as a part-time writer. it was also mentioned that I would be given a 3-month training course at Literature and Society university with professional writers from Singapore. As for the money, it was supposed to be transferred to my bank account 2 weeks ago. As I have not received any further information to claim my prize so far, I would be grateful if you could take a look at this situation. I really need this money to pay my bills because I am still a college student and I am living in a budget. Therefore, if you could, please transfer this money to my bank account soon. I can still wait for the contract and the training course. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Truong Nguyen
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter with regard to a
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prize
for amateur writers at Thanh
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Nien
newspaper.

I received a call from the newspaper’s
The word 'headquarter' is a verb. The noun to describe a corporate head office ends with an 's'.
headquarter
last month informing that I won the
first
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prize
for the writing contest.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
my
submission
was chosen
and posted in the science section of the volume published on May 25th.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prize
was 2 million Vietnam dongs along with a contract to work at your newspaper as a part-time writer.
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it
was
also
mentioned that I would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
a 3-month training course at Literature and Society university with professional writers from Singapore. As for the money, it
was supposed
to
be transferred
to my bank account 2 weeks ago.

As I have not received any
further
information to claim my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prize
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
far, I would be grateful if you could take a look at this situation. I
really
need this money to pay my bills
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I am
still
a college
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
student and
I am living in a budget.
Therefore
, if you could,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
transfer this money to my bank account
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. I can
still
wait for the contract and the training course.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Truong
Nguyen
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IELTS letter Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter with regard to a prize for amateur writers at Thanh Nien newspaper. I received a call from the newspaper’s headquarter informing that I won the first prize for the contest held to discover new writers last month. M v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
201 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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