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You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Expl v.5

You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Expl v. 5
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing about the advertisement that you have made about the one-week walking tour in the Queen hills. I am extremely excited to participate in the trip, however, I am bit anxious about my fitness level. Adventurous activities always captivate me, on top of that, I am an ardent lover of nature and your programme offers the both and hence, I truly do not want to miss this opportunity. Having the details of the cost and the schedule in advance will help me to plan things, as I have to tell my superiors about the work offs that I am going to avail and to plan my personal activities too. Please let know the details as early as possible. Since I am rather chubby, bit concerned whether my obesity will make me unfit for the tour. It would help if you could tell me about the precautions that I must take to take part effectively in the organized event. I am looking forward to your reply. Your' s faithfully, Akilan Palaniappan
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing about the advertisement that you have made about the one-week walking tour in the Queen hills. I am
extremely
excited to participate in the trip,
however
, I am
It seems that an article is missing.
bit
anxious about my fitness level.

Adventurous activities always captivate me,
on top of that
, I am an ardent lover of nature and your
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programme
offers the both and
hence
, I
truly
do not want to miss this opportunity.

Having the
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details
of the cost and the schedule in advance will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me to plan things, as I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
my superiors about the work offs that I am going to avail and to plan my personal activities too.
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Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
know the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
as early as possible.

Since I am
rather
chubby,
It seems that an article is missing.
bit
concerned whether my obesity will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
me unfit for the tour. It would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
me about the precautions that I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
take to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
effectively
in the organized
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
.

I am looking forward to your reply.

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Your&
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faithfully
,

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Akilan
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Palaniappan
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Expl v. 5

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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