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You are employed full-time and also doing a part-time evening course. You are not able to continue the course v.5

You are employed full-time and also doing a part-time evening course. You are not able to continue the course v. 5
Dear Sir, I am writing to demand some changes in the Spanish course that I have registered in this semester. As you aware I am working in the central hospital as a full-time qualified doctor. According to the recent hurricane which is happened in the north of country, my working schedule has altered and I need to move to the mentioned area to cure injured individuals. Despite my severe passion about this class, the sense of philanthropy do not allow me to stay here while I can be more beneficial in the other part of our homeland. Therefore, participating in this course is impossible for me. I would appreciated, if you could deposit my tuition and allow me to take part the same class in the next semester. I am looking forward to hearing your kind reply. Sincerely yours
Dear Sir,

I am writing to demand
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some
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changes
in the Spanish course that I have registered in this semester. As you aware I am working in the central hospital as a full-time qualified doctor. According to the recent hurricane which
is happened
in the north of country, my working schedule has altered and I need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to the mentioned area to cure injured individuals. Despite my severe passion about this
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class
, the sense of philanthropy do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to stay here while I can be more beneficial in the other part of our homeland.
Therefore
, participating in this course is impossible for me. I would
The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: "appreciate"
appreciated
, if you could deposit my tuition and
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allow
me to
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take part
the same
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class
in the
next
semester.

I am looking forward to hearing your kind reply.

Sincerely
yours
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are employed full-time and also doing a part-time evening course. You are not able to continue the course v. 5

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
138 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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