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You are employed full-time and also doing a part-time evening course. You are not able to continue the course v.5

You are employed full-time and also doing a part-time evening course. You are not able to continue the course v. 5

Dear Sir, I am writing to demand some changes in the Spanish course that I have registered in this semester. As you aware I am working in the central hospital as a full-time qualified doctor. According to the recent hurricane which is happened in the north of country, my working schedule has altered and I need to move to the mentioned area to cure injured individuals. Despite my severe passion about this class, the sense of philanthropy do not allow me to stay here while I can be more beneficial in the other part of our homeland. Therefore, participating in this course is impossible for me. I would appreciated, if you could deposit my tuition and allow me to take part the same class in the next semester. I am looking forward to hearing your kind reply. Sincerely yours

Dear Sir,

I am writing to demand This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
 in the Spanish course that I have registered in this semester. As you aware I am working in the central hospital as a full-time qualified doctor. According to the recent hurricane which is happened
 in the north of country, my working schedule has altered and I need to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocate
move
 to the mentioned area to cure injured individuals. Despite my severe passion about this This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
, the sense of philanthropy do not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 me to stay here while I can be more beneficial in the other part of our homeland. Therefore
, participating in this course is impossible for me. I would The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: "appreciate"appreciate
appreciated
, if you could deposit my tuition and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 me to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :participate
take part
 the same This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
 in the next
 semester.

I am looking forward to hearing your kind reply.

Sincerely
 yours

3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter You are employed full-time and also doing a part-time evening course. You are not able to continue the course v. 5

Letter

American English

4 paragraphs

138 words

This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1

4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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