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You have organised to go on holiday with your friend. However, you must change your plans. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: 1. tell them how much you are looking forward to the holiday2. explain why you must change your plans3. suggest alternativ v.1

You have organised to go on holiday with your friend. However, you must change your plans. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: 1. tell them how much you are looking forward to the holiday2. explain why you must change your plans3. suggest alternativ v. 1
Dear Baljeet, I hope you and Gaurav are doing well. I still cherish the time we enjoyed last year while at your home for your marriage, that was the occasion when we committed ourselves to visit Paris on my 30th birthday. But with much disappointment, I am writing to inform you that we might have to postpone the trip. I was really looking forward to spending some time with the new couple and to usher in my 30th birthday at the top of Eiffel tower. However, I have been recently promoted to team lead position and has been offered to move to Amsterdam for a month. Things changed rather quickly and to my benefit. I would be leaving for Amsterdam on 22nd July and would return after a month, though, no confirmation about return date has been made yet. If it suits you, I would suggest postponing the planned trip towards the end of the year and to a new location as it would be all snow in Europe. Probably, we can think about going to Thailand to ring in the new year. Also, we all will be having our Christmas holidays, so there won’t be much pain with regards to leaves from the job. I am sorry for this sudden change in the plan and am really looking forward to a year end trip with you. Moreover, you can suggest some destinations of your choice and then we can finalize the trip. Looking forward to hearing from you. Best Regards, Bhawna Sharma
Dear
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Baljeet
,

I hope you and Gaurav are doing well. I
still
cherish the time we enjoyed last
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
while at your home for your marriage, that was the occasion when we committed ourselves to visit Paris on my 30th birthday.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
with much disappointment, I am writing to inform you that we might
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
postpone the trip.

I was
really
looking forward to spending
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time with the new couple and to usher in my 30th birthday at the top of
If the term is a proper noun, use initial capitals.
Eiffel tower
.
However
, I have been recently promoted to team lead position and has
been offered
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to Amsterdam for a month. Things
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
rather
quickly
and to my benefit. I would be leaving for Amsterdam on 22nd July and would return after a month, though, no confirmation about return date has
been made
yet
.

If it suits you, I would suggest postponing the planned trip towards the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
and to a new location as it would be all snow in Europe.
Probably
, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about going to Thailand to ring in the new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
.
Also
, we all will be having our Christmas holidays,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
there won’t be much pain
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leaves
from the job.

I am sorry for this sudden
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in the plan and am
really
looking forward to a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
trip with you.
Moreover
, you can suggest
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
destinations of your
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
choice and
then we can finalize the trip.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Best Regards,

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Bhawna
Sharma
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have organised to go on holiday with your friend. However, you must change your plans. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: 1. tell them how much you are looking forward to the holiday2. explain why you must change your plans3. suggest alternativ v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
252 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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