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You have organised to go on a holiday with your friend However you must change your plans Write a letter to your friend In your letter Tell them how much you are looking forward to the holiday Explain why you must change your plans Suggest alternative arr v.2

You have organised to go on a holiday with your friend However you must change your plans Write a letter to your friend In your letter Tell them how much you are looking forward to the holiday Explain why you must change your plans Suggest alternative arr v. 2
Dear Sam, It’s been long time since we saw each other and I hope you’re keeping well in this time. I hope you’ll be very curious about our upcoming trip to Rajasthan and so I’m. As you know, I always have a keen interest in places of historical buildings and this passion forced me to choose this royal city for our holiday. Moreover, it took us a moth time in planning to make it a memorable one. Therefore, I am eagerly looking forward for this holiday. However, a little alteration needed to be made in the dates of trip because my cousin Lily sister is getting married. Coincidentally, Lily’s wedding and our trip dates falls on the same time. Actually, I need to be there carry out the rituals of a brother. Therefore, I can’t miss the occasion as it is her one of the biggest days. Is it okay if we postpone our trip by 10 days? Once you confirm me, I’ll postpone all the bookings and reservations. I’m hoping to meet you soon to recount our old memories Best wishes, Vikas
Dear Sam,

It’s been long time since we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
each other and I hope you’re keeping well in this time.

I hope you’ll be
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very
curious about our upcoming
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
to
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Rajasthan and
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so
I’m. As you know, I always have a keen interest in places of historical buildings and this passion forced me to choose this royal city for our holiday.
Moreover
, it took us a moth time in planning to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it a memorable one.
Therefore
, I am
eagerly
looking forward for this holiday.

However
, a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
alteration needed to
be made
in the dates of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
my cousin Lily sister is getting married.
Coincidentally
, Lily’s wedding and our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
dates falls on the same time. Actually, I need to be there carry out the rituals of a brother.
Therefore
, I can’t miss the occasion as it is her one of the biggest days.

Is it okay if we postpone our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
by 10 days? Once you confirm me, I’ll postpone all the bookings and reservations.

I’m hoping to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
to recount our
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
memories

Best wishes,

Vikas
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS letter You have organised to go on a holiday with your friend However you must change your plans Write a letter to your friend In your letter Tell them how much you are looking forward to the holiday Explain why you must change your plans Suggest alternative arr v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
182 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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