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Your friend is planning to start an import-export business and has sought your recommendation on a product. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter, explain: what product you recommendwhy you recommend that producthow it could benefit him/her in businessW v.2

Your friend is planning to start an import-export business and has sought your recommendation on a product. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter, explain: what product you recommendwhy you recommend that producthow it could benefit him/her in businessW v. 2
Dear John, I am glad to receive a letter from you after a long time. It is a great idea to start an import-export business, as market scenario is highly lucrative these days if product selection is superb. As your main focused countries are Srilanka and Bangladesh, I would recommend to start your business with rice and wheat. As per my market study since last 2 weeks, there is humongous shortage of these products - rice and wheat, because their land fertility level has reduced drastically. Later, you can introduced smart phone business, which is the 2nd most demanding item due to recent development in telecomm sector. If I am not wrong at my market study, you can recover your investment in just one year. Moreover, experts have predicted that market in Srilanka and Bangladesh will witness double-digit growth in couple of years, especially rice and wheat market followed by electronic market. Hope all my suggestions will help you in setting up your business, and will be waiting to hear your success story in few months. Best regards, Bibhu Kalita
Dear John,

I am glad to receive a letter from you after a long time. It is a great
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an import-export
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business
, as
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market
scenario is
highly
lucrative these days if product selection is superb. As your main focused countries are
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Srilanka
and Bangladesh, I would recommend to
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start
your
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business
with rice and wheat.

As per my
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market
study since last 2 weeks, there is humongous shortage of these products
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rice and wheat,
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because
their land fertility level has
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reduced
drastically
. Later, you can
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introduced
smart phone
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business
, which is the 2nd most demanding item due to recent development in
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telecomm
sector.

If I am not
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wrong
at my
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market
study, you can recover your investment in
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just
one year.
Moreover
, experts have predicted that
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market
in
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Srilanka
and Bangladesh will witness double-digit growth in
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couple of
years,
especially
rice and wheat
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market
followed by electronic market.

Hope all my suggestions will
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help
you in setting up your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
, and will be waiting to hear your success story in few months.

Best regards,

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Bibhu
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Kalita
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter Your friend is planning to start an import-export business and has sought your recommendation on a product. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter, explain: what product you recommendwhy you recommend that producthow it could benefit him/her in businessW v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
179 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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