Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

You have lost your student identification card This has created some problems for you Write a letter to the director of student services In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affecting you request a new card v.2

You have lost your student identification card This has created some problems for you Write a letter to the director of student services In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affecting you request a new card v. 2
Dear Sir, I am your student, John David, enrolled in MBA Executive Program. The intent of writing this letter is to seek your support. I have accidently lost my student’s identification card yesterday. As I could recall, I was studying in library till 8: 00 pm and then I went straight to my room. Today morning, while leaving home for University, I realized that I have lost it somewhere that I couldn’t recall. It’s quite a worrisome situation for me since I cannot access to certain areas in University, such as library or computer lab. As you are aware that exams are at hand and all the students spend most of their time in library for group studies and discussions. Most importantly, without card I cannot appear in exam. Therefore, I request you to please trigger the process of card re-issuance as soon as possible. Meanwhile, If I find my existing card; I will make sure to submit at the office so that it cannot be misused. I shall be grateful to you for this extended support. Waiting for your prompt response. Yours Sincerely, John
Dear Sir,

I am your student, John David, enrolled in MBA Executive Program. The intent of writing this letter is to seek your support. I have
Possible spelling mistake found.
accidently
lost my student’s identification
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
yesterday. As I could recall, I was studying in library till 8: 00 pm and then I went straight to my room.
This is a non-standard collocation. Normally, "this morning" is used.
Today morning
, while leaving home for University, I realized that I have lost it somewhere that I couldn’t recall.

It’s quite a worrisome situation for me since I cannot access to certain areas in University, such as library or computer lab. As you are aware that exams are at hand and all the students spend most of their time in library for group studies and discussions. Most
importantly
, without
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
I cannot appear in exam.
Therefore
, I request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
trigger the process of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
re-issuance as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. Meanwhile, If I find my existing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
; I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure to submit at the office
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that it cannot
be misused
.

I shall be grateful to you for this extended support. Waiting for your prompt response.

Yours
Sincerely
,

John
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
To learn a language is to have one more window from which to look at the world.
Chinese Proverb

IELTS letter You have lost your student identification card This has created some problems for you Write a letter to the director of student services In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affecting you request a new card v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts