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29. 10. 2017You have lost your credit card. Write a letter to the manager of your bank. In the letterexplain how you lost the cardask the manger to cancel the old card and to issue you a replacement v.2

29. 10. 2017You have lost your credit card. Write a letter to the manager of your bank. In the letterexplain how you lost the cardask the manger to cancel the old card and to issue you a replacement v. 2
Dear Sir or Madame, I am writing to inform you that I have lost my credit card. To begin with, I assume I should describe the circumstances that led to the loss. My family was having a vacation abroad. The holiday was an ideal one and everything went as I planned. Our departure was scheduled on 29th Mach 2017. We paid our bills by the plastic card and then we were delivered to the small local airport. All of a sudden I realize I forgot the card on a receptionist’s desk. I made a phone call to the hotel and a member of staff agreed to send the card to me by DHL express service. So, when my spouse and I arrived home, a delivery person was waiting for us with an envelope in his hands. I paid the bill and took the package. However, when I opened it, I figure out the sent plastic visa belongs to another person. Consequently, I lost any hope to return my property and decide to contact you to cancel the card because I am afraid it can be used by criminals to steal my savings. In addition, I would like to say it is a pleasure to be a clientele of your financial institution because your Visa card has been accepted by all restaurants, hotels and department stores I have every visited overseas. So, may you issue for me a novel card? I am waiting for your prompt response. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear Sir or Madame,

I am writing to inform you that I have lost my credit card.

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with, I assume I should
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describe
the circumstances that led to the loss. My family was having a vacation abroad. The holiday was an ideal one and everything went as I planned. Our departure
was scheduled
on 29th Mach 2017. We paid our bills by the plastic
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card and
then we
were delivered
to the
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small
local airport. All of a sudden I realize I forgot the
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card
on a receptionist’s desk. I made a phone call to the hotel and a member of staff
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agreed
to
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send
the
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card
to me by DHL express service.
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So
, when my spouse and I arrived home, a delivery person was waiting for us with an envelope in his hands. I paid the bill and took the package.
However
, when I opened it, I figure out the
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sent
plastic visa belongs to another person.

Consequently
, I lost any hope to return my property and decide to contact you to cancel the
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card
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because
I am afraid it can be
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used
by criminals to steal my savings.
In addition
, I would like to say it is a pleasure to be a clientele of your financial institution
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because
your Visa
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card
has been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
by all restaurants, hotels and department stores I have every visited overseas.
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So
, may you issue for me a novel card?

I am waiting for your prompt response.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
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Dubinchuk
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IELTS letter 29. 10. 2017You have lost your credit card. Write a letter to the manager of your bank. In the letterexplain how you lost the cardask the manger to cancel the old card and to issue you a replacement v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
250 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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