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You recently forgot or lost your Student ID card and now write to the academic officer for a replacement. You should write: How you lost itHow is it affecting your activities at university What you require him to do v.2

You recently forgot or lost your Student ID card and now write to the academic officer for a replacement. You should write: How you lost itHow is it affecting your activities at university What you require him to do v. 2
Dear Sir, I am a student at your university studying Mechanical Engineering and my academic identification number is 011580. Recently, I came back to campus on train from my hometown and unfortunately my student card has either been stolen or misplaced. I have filed a general diary regarding this matter and informed the security of the university’s estate office. The ID card was unique and it used to provide me access to the university’s library, gym, cafeteria as well as parking on campus. Furthermore, many of my online accounts are linked with the personal pin number which was written on the card. In addition to this, the university exam is approaching and without the ID card, I may not be able to sit for the assessments. All in all, I am in a critical situation and need your assistance with this matter. Therefore, I hope you understand my situation and by verifying the documents that I have sent you through the email, please issue a new card with the credentials and bar code so that I can access the different student services both on and off campus. Please contact me at the number 8801617598929 if you require any more information. Yours truthfully, Tahmeed Rahman
Dear Sir,

I am a student at your
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university
studying Mechanical Engineering and my academic identification number is 011580. Recently, I came back to campus on train from my hometown and unfortunately my student
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
has either
been stolen
or misplaced. I have filed a general diary regarding this matter and informed the security of the
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university’s
estate office.

The ID
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card
was unique and it
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used
to provide me access to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university’s
library, gym, cafeteria
as well
as parking on campus.
Furthermore
,
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many
of my online accounts
are linked
with the personal
This phrase is redundant ('N' stands for 'number'). Consider using "pin".
pin number
which
was written
on the
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card
.
In addition
to this, the
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university
exam is approaching and without the ID
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
, I may not be able to sit for the assessments. All in all, I am in a critical situation and need your assistance with this matter.

Therefore
, I hope you understand my situation and by verifying the documents that I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
you through the email,
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please
issue a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
with the credentials and bar code
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can access the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
student services both on and off campus.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
contact me at the number 8801617598929 if you require any more information.

Yours
truthfully
,

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Tahmeed
Rahman
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You recently forgot or lost your Student ID card and now write to the academic officer for a replacement. You should write: How you lost itHow is it affecting your activities at university What you require him to do v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
203 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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