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You have just received a letter from an overseas university saying that your IELTS bandscore of 6 is too low for admission to any of its Master’s Courses ( you need 6. 5)Write a letter to the admissions officer. In your letter Introduce yourself.  v.2

You have just received a letter from an overseas university saying that your IELTS bandscore of 6 is too low for admission to any of its Master’s Courses ( you need 6. 5)Write a letter to the admissions officer. In your letter Introduce yourself.  v. 2
Dear sir or madam, I am writing with regard to a letter I received from you dated 21th of July. My name is Rahi Honarvar and I have applied for the computer science and technology major at your university. I sent all the requested documents such as my bachelor degree, My IELTS score and the like. Unfortunately, after reading your letter I realized that my IELTS score does not meet the minimum score which is accepted by the Computer faculty. Since it is of high importance for me to get the admission in this field and for the first semester of the educational year, I would be grateful if you could provide me with some information about any possible alternative for gaining the entrance. I was wondering if it is feasible for me to take the IELTS exam again while I am studying at the university? I am looking forward to your prompt consideration and swift answer. Yours sincerely, Rahi Honarvar
Dear sir or madam,

I am writing with regard to a letter I received from you dated
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21th
of July.

My name is
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Rahi
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Honarvar
and I have applied for the computer science and technology major at your university. I
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sent
all
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the


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requested
documents such as my bachelor degree, My IELTS score and the like. Unfortunately, after reading your letter I

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
realized
that my IELTS score does not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the minimum score which is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
by the Computer faculty.

Since it is of high importance for me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the admission in this field and for the
first
semester of the educational year, I would be grateful if you could provide me with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
information about any possible alternative for gaining the entrance. I was wondering if it is feasible for me to take the IELTS exam again while I am studying at the university?

I am looking forward to your prompt consideration and swift answer.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Rahi
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Honarvar
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IELTS letter You have just received a letter from an overseas university saying that your IELTS bandscore of 6 is too low for admission to any of its Master’s Courses ( you need 6. 5)Write a letter to the admissions officer. In your letter Introduce yourself.  v. 2

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9 paragraphs
160 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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