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There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter: • Describe what the problem with the changing rooms v.2

There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter: • Describe what the problem with the changing rooms v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction about maintenance of changing rooms in your sports center. Rooms do not have proper hangers and water facilities. Moreover, flooring is rudimentary as well as slippery. Additionally, paint on the walls is in poor condition while there are no proper locks inside it which impacts the security. It was disheartening for the player to have such experience. I was scared that I would have injured myself on the floor. Furthermore, contemporary condition is not exemplary and is impacting negatively preparation of the players. Everyone is expecting good services in order to prepare themselves vehemently for the match. I hereby, request you to inspect all the change rooms thoroughly and deploy the engineer to revamp it. Especially, water facilities should be addressed first and foremost. Likewise, a supervisor can be employed for every block to monitor routine breakdown. I am hoping to receive a positive response. Yours Sincerely Navdeep Singh
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction about maintenance of changing rooms in your sports center.

Rooms do not have proper hangers and water facilities.
Moreover
, flooring is rudimentary
as well
as slippery.
Additionally
,

paint on the walls is in poor condition while there are no proper locks inside it which impacts the security.

It was disheartening for the player to have such experience. I
was scared
that I would have injured myself on the floor.
Furthermore
, contemporary condition is not exemplary and is impacting
negatively
preparation of the players. Everyone is expecting
good
services in order to prepare themselves
vehemently
for the match.

I hereby, request you to inspect all the
change
rooms
thoroughly
and deploy the engineer to revamp it.
Especially
, water facilities should
be addressed
first
and foremost.
Likewise
, a supervisor can
be employed
for every block to monitor routine breakdown.

I am hoping to receive a
positive
response.

Yours
Sincerely


Navdeep
Singh
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter: • Describe what the problem with the changing rooms v. 2

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
159 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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