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You are going to visit New Zealand for an ‘English and Homestay’ program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. Write your first letter to the family. In your letter introduce yourself ask the family some questions to get in v.9

You are going to visit New Zealand for an ‘English and Homestay’ program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. Write your first letter to the family. In your letter introduce yourself ask the family some questions to get in v. 9
Dear Mr. Mark Kennedy, Greetings! ! I am really happy to get an opportunity to be a home-stay guest in your hometown. I am very thankful to you for this splendid chances to be your kind guest. My name is Mohammed Aslam Noor Mohammed. I am an Indian and my hometown is Sivakasi, which is famously called as " Kutty Japan" . I am 30 years old. My hobbies are listening sermons and attending social services. Do have I to bring computer with me or do you have the spare system in your home? Do you need any essential things to bring, which is not available spare in your home for my usage? Please inform one week before of my departure. I will arrive Newzealand on 10th December, 2016 in the evening around 6 pm Newzealand GST time. My flight tickets are confirmed on the above schedule and the flight name is Cathey Pacific for your information. I am expecting your arrival in Newzealand International Airport to welcome and pick me to your home as well. Have a nice and good weekend. My sincere thanks and regards to you and your family. Yours truly, Mohammed Aslam
Dear Mr. Mark Kennedy,

Greetings! !

I am
really
happy to
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get
an opportunity to be a home-stay guest in your hometown. I am
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very
thankful to you for this splendid chances to be your kind guest.

My name
is Mohammed
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Aslam
Noor Mohammed. I am an Indian and my hometown is
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Sivakasi
, which is
famously
called as
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;
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Kutty
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Japan&quot
;
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.
I am 30 years
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old
. My hobbies are listening sermons and attending social services. Do have I to bring computer with me or do you have the spare system in your home? Do you need any essential things to bring, which is not available spare in your home for my usage?
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Please
inform one week
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before
of my departure.

I will arrive
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Newzealand
on 10th
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December, 2016
in the evening around 6 pm
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Newzealand
GST time. My flight tickets
are confirmed
on the above schedule and the flight name is
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Cathey
Pacific for your information.

I am expecting your arrival in
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Newzealand
International Airport to welcome and pick me to your home
as well
.

Have a nice and
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good
weekend. My sincere thanks and regards to you and your family.

Yours
truly
,

Mohammed
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Aslam
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS letter You are going to visit New Zealand for an ‘English and Homestay’ program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. Write your first letter to the family. In your letter introduce yourself ask the family some questions to get in v. 9

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
195 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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